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[mykindasong]

Happy Halloween~!

Welcome to the...

The Johnny's Fanfiction Concrit Meme
THIS is where you get to tell me about my writing.

Rules are simple, because we like it that way. And I like just copy and pasting~♥ Please to be commenting for yourself and yourself only. If another writer doesn't want to be on here, don't put them here! Also, please

Comments

A

[anonymous]

Re: A

[alexxasick]

me! me!
help me get better please!
alexxasick

Re: A

[arifuretakotoba]

so, I'll try to make up for the fact that my brain doesn't seem to work properly D

Re: A

[alexxasick]

Thank you very much for your insight:D
I'll try harder!

B

[anonymous]

Re: B

[bananyphophany]

bananyphophany
Looking for any and all improvements, my dears! :D Please don't be shy.

Re: B

[grydo2life]

You know how much I love your fics, so instead, I'll just give my little tidbit of where you can improve. The only problem I've ever had with your fics -- ever -- is that sometimes they're a little too minimalist. A lot of the time you focus so much on action that emotional gets forgone =[

Of course, that's only a bad thing in some fics. In others it works quite well!

You know I love you, bb! Keep writing amazingly; you deserve every rec you've ever gotten =3

Re: B

[bananyphophany]

EXAMPLES OR IT DIDN'T HAPPEN. >:[

... no, I kid, don't worry Cici-pie. XD What I mean is, can you find me examples and show me what could be done differently?

C

[anonymous]

Re: C

[crazy_otaku911]

crazy_otaku911 @ pocky_addiction

I've been getting steadily frustrated with my writing, so. ♥ Help me out, please~!

Re: C

[cammie13iyen]

I want to learn more and to improve my writing. pls help me out. :)

Re: C

[hotfruits]

you're pretty much perfect.

D

[anonymous]

Re: D

[death_note13]

death_note13 @ tortue_fics

:D

Re: D

[elanielyn]

Time to be honest~ I trust you to be adult enough so no bad feelings? >3>

Not that I have bad opinions anyway. I think you've gotten very good lately. I didn't like your old stuff much, things that Grease fic that misteryously disappeared or the pirates!fic when it was only porn and incest and those things, but your style has been getting better. Your plots have gotten interesting and well worked on, and of course your grammar and your English are better than mine xD I like how you can change and experiment the sentence structures to make your fics beautiful. And you always do research, which is awesome and helps a lot ♥

All in all, you're awesome.

Re: D

[death_note13]

;__; you hurt my feelings. You big meanie butt.

xDDD I didn't like my old stuff much; there were a few I liked, but some of them...LIKE THAT FIC OMG. To my defense, it was about 5 am when I was writing it. xD XP It'll still be porn and incest, with plot though. Because plot is fun. I'm glad you think they're interesting :D ♥ and my sentence structure is shittttt. I just misuse tense and play with commas/semicolons >.> Research=♥ I believe that good fic are well researched if they're about something someone has not a lot of knowledge on.

♥ :D You're the awesome one, though ♥ Clearly.

E

[anonymous]

Re: E

[elanielyn]

elanielyn at onionlullabys

Re: E

[anonymous]

I actually stumbled onto your fics by accident, and even though none of it was for any of the pairings I usually read, I still enjoyed it very much! I also admire you so much for being one of the few writers in the fandom that I've been able to find that actually writes truly kinky porn.

The only criticism I can possibly offer is that sometimes your writing feels oddly stiff. In some fics, you seemed to be lacking fluidity in places that really kind of need it. But even that doesn't really detract from how good the fics are overall.

Keep doing what you're doing!

[death_note13]

Elllllly ♥

I really love your fics ♥ And that's not just because you own my soul :D Because you really do have talent. ♥

Now, because this is a concrit meme, I'll give you some XP

When I first gave my soul to you; I loved your style then; but that was just well...porn. xD And you write a lot of porn; (not a bad thing btw) but then, I suppose porn must be easier to write? Not that you write too much kinky porn; but write non-porny stuff too, Ely >.> that sounds completely weird coming from meAnd you claim your stuff is stupid, it's not. Don't say it's stupid, because it's faaaaaaaaaaaar from stupid. Your grammar and sentence structure is a bit off sometimes, but that's totally okay, because it doesn't take away from what you're writing. ♥ And you know I'll help you when you need it, because your writing is amazing