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[mykindasong]

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The Johnny's Fanfiction Concrit Meme
THIS is where you get to tell me about my writing.

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[anonymous]

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[bananyphophany]

bananyphophany
Looking for any and all improvements, my dears! :D Please don't be shy.

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[grydo2life]

You know how much I love your fics, so instead, I'll just give my little tidbit of where you can improve. The only problem I've ever had with your fics -- ever -- is that sometimes they're a little too minimalist. A lot of the time you focus so much on action that emotional gets forgone =[

Of course, that's only a bad thing in some fics. In others it works quite well!

You know I love you, bb! Keep writing amazingly; you deserve every rec you've ever gotten =3

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[bananyphophany]

EXAMPLES OR IT DIDN'T HAPPEN. >:[

... no, I kid, don't worry Cici-pie. XD What I mean is, can you find me examples and show me what could be done differently?

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[grydo2life]

Oh yes, make Cici go through your fics to find examples. Don't just take her word for it D<

Kidding. But, for example, your drabbles. Drabbles are great for toying with emotions, but yours always seem to focus on physical interaction, dialogue, or action of some kind. This works for you a lot, since those are your strong points, but some of your fics could really benefit from more attention to how your peeps are feeling. Like...

From "Hot and Cold" in your latest drabble batch. It's a strong fic, but it's all so physical! We get little glimpses into their heads, and some of your word choices are clever enough to give us an idea, but this is one of those fics where it would've been much more impacting had it been more internal rather than external.

Does that help? XD

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[anonymous]

I'm not actually in your fandom, but "Not Enough" is one of the hottest fics I've read. ♥

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[bananyphophany]

Oh wow. :O Thank you very much. I'm glad that it has... appeal outside the fandom it's in? XD I'm very flattered♥

>:)

[katrinasacay]

you know...you always write tegomass making out....tegomass making sex..a not so innocent tegomass most of the time!!!

AND THAT'S WHAT I LOVE ABOUT YOU AND YOUR WORKS.

please keep it up. :D

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[bananyphophany]

XD Kat.
It's all Misa's influence, you know? :| She makes me write dirty TegoMass.
My current TegoMass is dirty too, oops...

I LOVE YOU TOO, KAT♥

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[snowaltz]

I've always enjoyed your works; I find that the plots are interesting, your English flows, and the characters believable. Of cos, your sexy fics are very hot and mash up my brains. My favourite fics of yours include Photogenic, Claustrophobic and The Best Policy.

I hope you'll have inspiration to continue writing your unfinished stories one day, i.e. Voices (you wrote that right..? Cos' I can't find it on your LJ anymore..) and the Five KoyaShige dramas that never happened.

Thanks for the wonderful read so far and I look forward to more KoyaShige and Tegomass (personal bias) fics from you <3

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[bananyphophany]

Awww, thank you! All KoyaShige fics, eh? XD That's cool, I was quite fond of TBP too. c:

XD I never originally planned to extend the KoyaShige dramas fic... >__> But who knows. One day when I've finished all my current WIPs and feeling like writing long ass KoyaShige... XD Well.
And yeah, Voices is mine. I private-locked all the entries and took it off my index, because I started writing it during my second year in fandom, and I think I've developed quite a lot as a writer since then. I think if I left it the way it is now, there would be a big leap in style and format and everything... anyways, I plan to do a big overhaul of it, and then repost one day in the future. XD

Thank you for reading my stuff and staying with me for so long! :D I really appreciate it♥

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[grydo2life]

Cici wants you to finish Voices too *___*
I loved the plot of it, and I've been dying to know where it goes ;___;

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[snowaltz]

I started reading your KoyaShige fics first and they stuck with me. I enjoy your Tegomass too (you know I only read these 2 pairings) but I feel stronger over your KoyaShige ones.

I look forward to Voices. The plot is interesting and I definitely would love to find out how the story progresses.

I appreciate you sharing your fics with us too! ♥

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[yey_yey]

You know what kills me? You come up with these awesome AUs, write a one-shot, and I once I read it, I know I'll spend the rest of my fandom life waiting for a follow-up.

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[bananyphophany]

>___> Any AU you're talking about in particular? Depending on which one I could have news for you...

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[yey_yey]

The one that's coming to mind is "Stargazing". It's probably kind of embarrassing how many times I've gone back to your journal to re-read it.