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[mykindasong]

Happy Halloween~!

Welcome to the...

The Johnny's Fanfiction Concrit Meme
THIS is where you get to tell me about my writing.

Rules are simple, because we like it that way. And I like just copy and pasting~♥ Please to be commenting for yourself and yourself only. If another writer doesn't want to be on here, don't put them here! Also, please

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[anonymous]

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[crazy_otaku911]

crazy_otaku911 @ pocky_addiction

I've been getting steadily frustrated with my writing, so. ♥ Help me out, please~!

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[cammie13iyen]

I want to learn more and to improve my writing. pls help me out. :)

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[hotfruits]

you're pretty much perfect.

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[crazy_otaku911]

You're really biased. :P

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[hotfruits]

Nuh uh :3

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[chibayasu]

chibayasu

Only two pieces, but anything is appreciated! :D

carmine_pink

[carmine_pink]

I got, uh, zero replies in the last concrit meme *sadface* so I'm hoping for better luck this time :) I'll take anything you throw at me as long as it's constructive.

Re: carmine_pink

[carmine_pink]

And all of my fics are at carmine_pink, fic index here.

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[anonymous]

I think your a good writer, but I'm not particularly a fan of your writing style. It just seems a bit...plain to me. I think experimenting with different styles might do you some good. Don't be afraid to take risks. =]

That being said, I like that you stick to lower ratings. There's so much smut around, it's just nice to see some plot every once in a while.

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[carmine_pink]

Thank you for the feedback. That's exactly what I've been worrying about, that my writing is too plain and simple. I've been meaning to change things up a little but I don't know where to start. Do you have any specific examples on what writing styles you think could spice things up?

Ahaha, that's mostly because I'm too much of a chicken to write porn >.< But I do think that sometimes a story is fine enough without smut added to it.

Thanks so much for the concrit, I appreciate it!

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[anonymous]

Different anon to the above, but I wanted to say I agree with most of what she said. I also love the fact that you write lower rated fics - not everything has to end in sex, and not everything is a better fic because of the inclusion of sex, so I am glad that you are comfortable and strong enough in your story conception to not need to go there. Obviously if you want to go there I would be more than happy to read it...but it's nice to see them without that as well

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[carmine_pink]

Thank you. It's good to hear that there are those who feel the same way I do. Sometimes I fear people might be less interested in my fics because of my prudishness about smut, LOL. But on the other hand I enjoy exploring story lines and characters without focusing on the sex. I do like to sprinkle a lot of innuendo though :D

Those suggestions are wonderful! I've never even realized I use a lot of passive voice. I've also been trying to show more rather than tell, but I still need a lot of practice on that. I'll surely keep your suggestions in mind when I work on my upcoming fics. Thank you so much for the detailed feedback and for continuing to read my works &hearts

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[shigefan1992]

First I have to tell you, again, how I simply adore your writing.

Your writing style is really simple, but you portray all your characters really well. Besides that I really just love how your descriptions are so detailed and simply well-written.

I'm not exactly sure how much concrit I can give, although I did look back at some of your older works. All I could really find was a few oddly phrases here and there, but you've pretty much fixed that by getting a good beta reader.

Overall I simply love your work. To be completely honest you're one of my favorite NEWS fic writers.

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[carmine_pink]

Thank you so much. I've been working hard on my descriptions and I'm glad my efforts show. My beta has been helping me to improve as well. I'm flattered that you like my fic and hope you'll continue reading :)

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[changetje]

changetje @ euphoricfields

I'd love to hear what people think of my stuff :)