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[mykindasong]

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The Johnny's Fanfiction Concrit Meme
THIS is where you get to tell me about my writing.

Rules are simple, because we like it that way. And I like just copy and pasting~♥ Please to be commenting for yourself and yourself only. If another writer doesn't want to be on here, don't put them here! Also, please

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[anonymous]

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[alexxasick]

me! me!
help me get better please!
alexxasick

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[arifuretakotoba]

so, I'll try to make up for the fact that my brain doesn't seem to work properly D

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[alexxasick]

Thank you very much for your insight:D
I'll try harder!

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[anonymous]

I agree with the first comment. I feel as if having a beta reader can be a really helpful thing, because they'll catch as many of those little grammar mistakes for you as possible. Beta readers aren't something to be ashamed of when they really do help you improve your work. Just be sure to ask someone to beta you know is better with grammar than you are because sometimes asking a friend on the same level won't make any difference.

I thought your first series (I think it was 'Toys' and some others?) was actually really interesting concept wise. There were just a few transition issues that a beta would be able to help you fix.

Overall I think I have seen your work improve. I say keep going, keep trying new things! Don't be afraid to write something you'd not considered possible before because you might surprise yourself. Good luck! :)

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[alexxasick]

Thanks a lot!
I'll look into it and try harder :)
sometimes I don't use Beta-reader because they are so busy -_- and I don't know anyone else who can help.

xD and about themes :S it's just sometimes I feel themes have life of their own xD and find their way into my head, then I write xD
thanks again :)

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[aishayue]

please give me constructive comments. i'm still trying to improve. ^-^

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[anonymous]

I simply love your fics. They are exciting, loveable characters, great imagination. Sometimes I feel like you could be more original as far as the plot is concerned. And I dare tell you this because I think you're capable of coming up with even better stories. But honestly, I think it's a confidence issue. So have confidence in yourself because what you're doing is great!
I think you could also use a beta. Your vocabulary is wide, so there is nothing wrong there. But your grammar can be messy sometimes. It's not distracting but if you want your fics to be even more awesome, I suggest you to do that.
And keep writing, I'm enjoying reading your fics (:

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[aishayue]

thank you so much for this one ^-^
i actually have some plots in mind, but i struggle when it comes to writing them down... whenever i try to write a fic i go: "eh? how can i write it?" and sadly, sometimes i end up writing something different from what i was planning *sighs*
i was actually thinking of using a beta...but i don't know who to ask since, 1 everyone is pretty busy, 2 i am slow in updating. 3. i hate my net connection...T^T

again, arigatou. it really helped me ^.^ I'll try to come up with a new fic hoping to improve more... ^-^ *hugs*

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[anonymous]

I'm glad you took it seriously

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[aishayue]

<3<3<3
actually i am touched. these advices can only come from someone who really knows or reads whatever I write and It really makes me happy.
I will really try to do as you adviced...I might take some time, but surely, I won't forget what you said.

and yes, I actually love heavy stories...

*hugs*

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[aliciaswr]

/parks name here.

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[anonymous]

Personally I like your fics, they're always rather sweet and cute, which I find to be a good thing, especially considering the fandom you write in.

The only problem I've found with your writing is that your characterizations come across a bit flat sometimes. This really only happens occasionally.
Bseides that there are random times of grammatical error from time to time.

My best suggestion would be to get a beta-reader, as there's nothing majorly wrong with yor writing.

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[aliciaswr]

First, thanks for reading my fics.

I'm aware of my weakness in the characterization. Perhaps because I'm writing someone that exist, I tend to overlook the character parts. Hmm.. I'll work on that. Thanks alot!

And yeah, my grammar.. >.<

Thanks for your comment!

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[arifuretakotoba]

arifuretakotoba @ treaure_chest
:D

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[aridseas]

aridseas

My last foray here was very helpful, so here I am again. Thank you in advance. ♥