Bridgits Flame: Take Two

[sporty502]

Hey all, heres my entry for Bridgits Flame this week!  I am really excited to post this one, its what I wanted to post last week so if you need a reference point just look at my entry from last week.  That can be considered as a prequel, but you really shouldnt need to read it to understand this one.

And I promise that next weeks entry will be alot

Comments

[mermaidbia]

Very well-done. I especially liked the random and stacato visions she sees before her eyes, inserted in the prose - that was a good technique.

Good luck this week!

[sporty502]

thanks so much!
looks like i'm gonna need it! : )

[desert_rose]

Hi there

Edit part two:

[desert_rose]

Sorry for some of the mess with these edits, but I'm having problems, that may or may not be my computer's fault

Editing

[cedarwolfsinger]

The piece is well done. It has an energy that is very young. This kind of an event is so “life and death” to her - that is a very young energy and mindset. Not bad, not good, just young

[cedarwolfsinger]

I had to keep on cutting so the edit would fit in a comment. If you want the whole edit, e-mail me at mroccedar@gmail.com and I will e-mail it back to you. Sorry if this doesn't make sense... Cedar