Torchwood: Exorcism

[notevery]

It is all the fault of the fucking French boy.  Or rather, it is all the fault of the French boy Jack is fucking.

Not that Ianto is jealous.  Why would he be?  Not after what happened-not after what Jack did to Lisa.  Not even weeks afterwards, not even when Jack has been so polite, so eager to conquer Ianto’s heart and mind, win him back into the

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[wildestranger]

Oooh. This is gorgeous, and such effective language (one can feel being pressed against the wall with Ianto, and my wasn't that lovely *g*). Wonderful writing. :)

[notevery]

Thank you very much! It's great to hear you enjoyed it. I wouldn't mind being pressed against a wall by Jack either...

[notevery]

Thank you so much for the detailed comment! I'm glad to hear that you liked it. As far as Ianto not punching back goes, I was seriously considering it, but ended up (just) not including it, largely because I felt that after the events of Cyberwoman Ianto became, for a while, quiet (though this could just be the impression given by his relatively small amount of screen-time in Small Worlds. Damn lack of Ianto). I also thought that since Ianto didn't expect to get punched, his first reaction would probably be surprise, though perhaps I didn't make that clear enough. I completely agree with what you're saying, though--it's a weakness I can see there too, and though I'm happy with these events (from a writer's POV), if I ever get the time I'd love to write exactly the same beginning leading onto a fistfight and then rough sex with Ianto 'on top'. (Then again, that could just be because it would both a) turn me on and b) fulfill my interest in different timelines/alternate realities/the differences made by single choices

[notevery]

I'm not offended at all! Concrit (and that was definitely constructive, as well as being really considerately phrased) is something I welcome with open arms. I know that not all fanfic authors are writing for the same reasons, and I can totally understand someone who's just having some fun not wanting concrit--but for me fanfic, whilst being fun of course, is also a way for me to practice and improve my writing, and concrit is 100% essential for that. I wish more people were happy giving it! Then again, given the reaction it gets in some places, I can see why people aren't

[athousanderrors]

Hngh. That is all.

*tries to reform self from puddle of guh*

Nope. No good. You killed me.

And I had to let out a little 'teehee' at the mention of 'philtrum'. Aaah, my monaboyd days...*sighs nostalgically*

[notevery]

Mmm, monaboyd. Now there's a guilty pleasure!

(And what can I say: 'philtrum' is a pretty awesome word.)

Thanks for the comment! Glad you liked it.

[notevery]

Also, your icon is absolutely amazing.

[beguiled_child]

Wow. That. Was. Utterly. Amazing.
Jack was in quite a few ways being a complete and utter bastard... but somehow it was sexy as hell, which makes me a tad worried on my taste in men but oh well. Your Jack was absolutely gorgeous, no doubt about it.
I'm sorry but I don't have any constructive criticism, because it was perfect and I love it, in fact I love it more than is probably healthy. *smiles like a lunatic*

[notevery]

Thank you so much for such a lovely comment! I too am now grinning like a madman :P

[pforte]

Excellent style. I especially liked the way you described actions and emotions. Very enjoyable read.

Oh, and though not the main focus of the story, the sex was hot. :D

[notevery]

Thank you! I'm really glad the style worked--I wanted to try something new to convey Ianto's state of mind, since it was written in such tight third-person, but I wasn't sure the disjointed style would work. I'm glad to hear it did!

I'm glad to hear the sex was hot, too.