The Definition of Want - Chapter 8

[audreyii_fic]

Title: The Definition of Want
Author: audreyii_fic
Fandom: Twilight (Team Jacob)
Rating: M
Characters: Bella, Jacob, Edward, and others (J/B)
Genre: Romance/Humor/Angst -- you know, all the good ones.
Warnings: Bad language and eventual sex.

Summary: You know how Edward offered to let Bella and Jacob make puppies? And we all

Comments

[onetraveller]

GUH. So I read all the chapters and firstly, I feel terribly guilty for not reviewing each of them. I'll try my best to be decent length

[audreyii_fic]

Ooh, thanks for delurking! :) And "attacking" the plotline is probably a good term for it (I feel like I'm Uma Thurman in Kill Bill and I've got a katana in each hand... except it's really just a laptop and I really can't wear a yellow jumpsuit... oh my God I'm tired). I'm happy you like the snark, and the fight, and the heart-destruction (though I do apologize for that). And I also squee like an itty-bitty fangirl for Charlie... that's just how I roll.

Thanks, and I'm glad you're enjoying :)

[lita_cena425]

Finally leaving a review, thought I would jump in at some point

[audreyii_fic]

You somehow make me feel Jacob's pain and Bella's pain through Jacob.

Thank you for that :) It's really... um... well, I'll be honest, I've worked my ass off at that part, and it's only succeeding about half the time, so I'm glad it's working for you :)

And I'm really happy you stuck with this, in spite of not knowing how you felt about it. I know it's a squidgy concept. (In retrospect, I really should have slapped some kind of "No! It's not what you think!" warning label on the summary.) But it just... I don't know. I wanted to fuck around with it, you know? And somehow, it seems to be more or less coming together (aside from the inevitable parts where I glare viciously at an instance where I've used the same adverb in two consecutive paragraphs and hate everything everywhere). So... yeah. Anyway, yay, and thanks :)

I feel like I am babbling to a writing genius when I should just shut up and enjoy the damn story.A) I like babbling, it makes me happy, and B) *snort*. Honey, Nabakov is a genius. I'm a chick with a laptop who

[lita_cena425]

I know this is EXTREMELY late but it was sitting on the laptop for a while

[audreyii_fic]

Thanks :) Yeah, it's a... different story. Except not really. Except kinda. It's hard to describe. It's an attempt to do a hard in-character twist on a bizarre plot. It's kept my brain busy, I can tell you that much...

[hysterichotel]

Unfffff. You write this so well. Especially the scene with Embry and all them, actually acting like real teenagers. I love it.

I can't wait to see Leah's reaction xD

I also can't wait until Sunday. I'll be at Warped Tour then... ): bah.

A+ *lovelovelove*

[audreyii_fic]

Especially the scene with Embry and all them, actually acting like real teenagers.

Glad you liked! :) I always felt there wasn't enough punching between the boys in the books...

[lunasol28]

My heart is seriously broken right now. I can't even...*wipes tear* Poor Jake and damn this whole situation geez. Hmm...you don't make things easy do you *sigh* but I love that about your writing so don't take this as complaining. People always make fics like these hard in the first two chapters but then things come magically together and everyone is there for everyone but not yours. Your fic is real life with real emotions wrapped up in someone else's fictional world that you've taken control of and made heartbreakingly beautiful. I like that Jake is confused now and that the joy of having sex with Bella has sort of gone away because he knows that he fucked up, he fucked up royally and now he doesn't really know what he wants. And I love that you have Charlie showing Bella just as confused without her having to be there to do it.

This is amazing and I can't wait to find out what the very high cost is.

[audreyii_fic]

Hmm...you don't make things easy do you

Nope :)

I'm glad you like how I'm handling this. I would say it in more interesting and impressive ways, but I'm... so... tired... But you are awesome and I'm glad that you like my stuff and yay :)

[killerlashes]

WOMAN, you are ripping my monkeyfucking (kudeaux to Algie for that) HEART OUT. As if PMS wasn't bad enough, I am sitting here crying over your depiction of a beautiful, beautiful boy who isn't REAL. GAAAAH.
This:

I heard Quil snort. "Bullshit. Things you fix never break again."
Yeah, right.

As previously said, you've nailed Teenage Boy-- Quembry are kickass and hysterical, and their dialogue is both hilarious and real. Same for Charlie; he's become ever so beloved to me because his relationship with Bella is maybe the only one SMeyer actually DIDN'T fuck up, and when someone as awesome as you adds to that, it's just icing. Yummy, yummy cream-cheese icing.
Hokay, I could ramble more, but I need to blow my nose and wipe the mascara off my face.

Your writing makes ME want to write more. And better. I have you to thank (or blame) for the appx. 1.3K of J/B quasi-smut currently sitting open in my Scrivener window. (Did I just admit that?! Shit.)

[audreyii_fic]

monkeyfucking

Awesome.

Sorry about hitting you with this chapter during PMS, I really am. I know how that goes and man, it sucks. (Though I usually punch things, THEN cry.) And now I want cream-cheese icing.

And go! Go write! Finish smut! I insist! *sits down and crosses arms*