Since you have not responded to my nagging, nor accomplished any giving of feedback that I can see, I will make my request much more explicit and cite rule 10 on our community's info:
10. The best way to get critique is to give it. A community cannot survive without some measure of give and take; help your fellow member out and, in doing so, they'll come to recognise your LJ name. That split-second recognition may in turn make all the difference when they're debating whether or not to reply to your works in the future! It's also just courteous, so please remember to critique before you post!
As far as I can see, you've posted quite a lot without having returned any comments to anyone else. And I do expect this to be rectified. If this nagging is being done in error, please notify me.
I'm surprised you make so many claims for love without backing them up (it's been awhile since I wrote any academic essays but aren't you supposed to do that
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To the author: this is a short essay. You need to focus it in a serious way. Pick one zone in which love operates, and develop it. Humanity's love for animals. Romantic love in retirement homes. Love of nation in art. Something tight.
And, as copperbird says, back up everything you say. Proposition, evidence, conclusion. Right now you are just making claim after claim after claim, and a sequence of assertions do not amount to an essay.
I agree with a few of these comments. Specifically about the claims issue. Additionally, I feel that this essay lacks focus. My suggestion is to narrow such a broad topic into one solid characteristic. Love has too many encompassing facets to attempt to blush over them as quickly as you do. You're not doing the subject any justice by trying to tack in any and everything you can think of. Narrow it down, and you'll avoid sounding wishy-washy.
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When was the last time you gave anyone else feedback?
Love your favorite bitch nag,
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10. The best way to get critique is to give it. A community cannot survive without some measure of give and take; help your fellow member out and, in doing so, they'll come to recognise your LJ name. That split-second recognition may in turn make all the difference when they're debating whether or not to reply to your works in the future! It's also just courteous, so please remember to critique before you post!
As far as I can see, you've posted quite a lot without having returned any comments to anyone else. And I do expect this to be rectified. If this nagging is being done in error, please notify me.
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To the author: this is a short essay. You need to focus it in a serious way. Pick one zone in which love operates, and develop it. Humanity's love for animals. Romantic love in retirement homes. Love of nation in art. Something tight.
And, as copperbird says, back up everything you say. Proposition, evidence, conclusion. Right now you are just making claim after claim after claim, and a sequence of assertions do not amount to an essay.
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*happy dance*
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Now I feel inspired to engage in some extra pointless hairsplitting!!
(You probably want to say inexplicable, not unexplainable. Check a dictionary for why.)
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