If this is all too much work, you can make a list of things you don't immediately think of, that love also is. Force depth. There's nothing really wrong with have a straight list of assertions, because that list can be the argument itself, but that's a pretty advanced style at this point.
Love is a mango. Love is a tree. Love is the ax. Love is the fireplace.
etc.
It makes logical progression towards a conclusion.
Of course, secretly, this is probably much harder than rewriting the essay completely.
I don't understand the structure of this essay. I see the intro, and I see the conclusion, but your three (or four?) "body" paragraphs fail to make any solid points. It reads more like aimless ramble on "love" sandwiched between a beginning and an end. The main problem lies in the fact that this essay lacks any real focus (see above).
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Love is a mango.
Love is a tree.
Love is the ax.
Love is the fireplace.
etc.
It makes logical progression towards a conclusion.
Of course, secretly, this is probably much harder than rewriting the essay completely.
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