I'm surprised you make so many claims for love without backing them up (it's been awhile since I wrote any academic essays but aren't you supposed to do that
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To the author: this is a short essay. You need to focus it in a serious way. Pick one zone in which love operates, and develop it. Humanity's love for animals. Romantic love in retirement homes. Love of nation in art. Something tight.
And, as copperbird says, back up everything you say. Proposition, evidence, conclusion. Right now you are just making claim after claim after claim, and a sequence of assertions do not amount to an essay.
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To the author: this is a short essay. You need to focus it in a serious way. Pick one zone in which love operates, and develop it. Humanity's love for animals. Romantic love in retirement homes. Love of nation in art. Something tight.
And, as copperbird says, back up everything you say. Proposition, evidence, conclusion. Right now you are just making claim after claim after claim, and a sequence of assertions do not amount to an essay.
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*happy dance*
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Now I feel inspired to engage in some extra pointless hairsplitting!!
(You probably want to say inexplicable, not unexplainable. Check a dictionary for why.)
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97 words on why and how not
¡go!
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