"The Talk", I send you LOVE in fan fiction form...

[theidolhands]

I wrote this a while ago, but st_minority story "Tell Me You're Here" inspired me to have the courage to share it. Just an alternate universe to mix the bitter with the sweet. I love your writing, but this scene called from my soul one night. It honestly wrote itself (my hand felt possesed) and Mr. Wonka has just told me to post it RIGHT NOW! And, I think

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[sweetphaex]

*__* <- Me staring at your nekkid ness because i'm a perv

Ooooooooohhhhh this is good! Great use of St. Minority's story arc here...

That's OK, I asked for it

[theidolhands]

(walking out naked in public and all) Second, your icon is wonderful as pet_pet_angel stated. That is one of the best scenes in "Finding Neverland" and Third, I honestly hope the author doesn't think I'm ripping them off. It happens to be a main theme if one tries to tackle the duo and this was one way I saw it playing out. Since st_minority chose that end of the spectrum, I thought it would be nice to offer the opposing. Especially since it practically dreamt itself up.

Extra thanks for reviews from moderators! *smiles*

Re: That's OK, I asked for it

[sweetphaex]

It just screams "I finaly found Neverland, it was under the couch the whole time..." dunnit?

Re: ...omfg... <_o

[theidolhands]

Aww...threre you are! Hey, I do that "I don't really have time for this" before and after work thing too!!

I liked reading your emotional thoughts on the whole matter. You seem especially perceptive in those matters, as you already know. People do think that being gay is 'not normal', but a relationship with Willie Wonka would be 'abnormal' in so many ways that I figured using 'being with a man' or 'he's only a child' didn't really sum it up enough. Surprisingly vague was better.

Mr. Bucket, I really hate making you the villian, but it had to be someone. Besides, it plays nicely against "Tell Me Your Here" where Mrs. Bucket is the insigator. Even more contrast, I like it. I am very glad that you liked the whole thing and I forgive you for skipping my last story. I guess it's just to sacchrine, but it has the OC characters...I put A LOT of thought into it, but this may be the wrong forum for it. I'm just working up to ideas and wanted to have a fun time with it....not sure exactly where it's headed or how dramatic to make

[tehfluffeh]

Ho, hi! Say, you remember who I am? (Hint: This is the first time I'm leaving a signed review for your story. :P)

Anyway, this story, much like your others, is extremely long, which is just wonderful. Ya know, if you have got some great story idea to expand on, by all means - babble! As long as it is well-written, I don't mind having to hit the down arrow on my keyboard a dozen different times just to get through the whole story. *Grins*

I think that the length of your stories is partly contributed to the fact that you have a tendency to elaborate your descriptions. You know, some authors are like - a few sentences, snap, and one paragraph's done. Nothing wrong with that, of course, since too much description can end up causing a story to seem overly wishy-washy at times. I'm however very glad to see that, while you spare no expense when it comes to details, you don't let it go overboard. An example -

Mr. Bucket made a jagged sounding sigh, twisting his long mouth further to the edges of his face. It was a modest face: long, gaunt

[tehfluffeh]

(cont'd)

My favorite part of the story (and most of other readers' favorite parts as well, I believe) would have to be the interaction between Wonka and Charlie, though. I love the way you managed to bring out the light, almost innocent relationship between the two so well, and yet still manage to leave that small hint that perhaps, just perhaps one of them may have feelings for the other than run much deeper than just plain, platonic friendship.

Charlie snatching away the telescope and Wonka's offense to that action was classic - I so could imagine that happening! It too shows how at ease Charlie must be with Wonka to be able to treat the man in such a casual, friendly manner - especially knowing how intimidating Wonka can be at times. And later on in the story, when Wonka is confronting Charlie about what's bothering him - I absolutely loved the way you treated that scene. Charlie's hesitation and nervousness, Wonka's fear at hurting the younger boy - very well done, indeed. I also adore your description of Wonka's face -

His

You're just the new me!

[theidolhands]

I used to blather away at people and analyze their stories in a rather siimiliar way. If you haven't been reading things in this forum all along. Give yourself a treat and read from the beginning; all of the art, comments, strories, photo manipulations!! Pure love! And you will see my looong comments from before I even thought I could right anything! I love your reviews, don't stop

Re: You're just the new me!

[tehfluffeh]

I am??! Wow. That's cool. I came across this community about a few weeks ago, and I've only been keeping up with some of the more recent stories. Methinks I really need to start going through the community archives. *Nods

[initial_aitch]

What do you want with other people's reviews when you have tehfluffeh?

It's not so far from St. Minority's universe...or ANY fan fic universe. The film is supposed to end so hunky-dory, but with a man who has so much emotional baggage, and a little kid who's forced to become a phenom after him, well...it won't be an easy road for them, especially if we throw in a love relationship. Though peripheral in the film, the Buckets should rightly be concerned with their son.

[initial_aitch]

Ok, so I couldn't get away with just saying hi, huh? Pressure, pressure. I'm not daunted by the others; I didn't read the others. Well, I was a bit stymied. The length gave me some difficulty (*yeah, that's what Charlie said*) but I've read it all now.

The devil's advocate type of dialogue exchange works for the Buckets, who are really trying to work out what's best for their son. There are many forces at work that they need to talk out. I made their half of the story into a play in my head. When there's a lot of dialogue I tend to do that, even blocking out the scene watching the characters wandering around flailing their arms. but enough about me.

Wonka getting flustered when Charlie started crying was quite charming, as was their hug. It's nice--and quite logical--to think of them both as being worried they'll upset each other. They ARE two of a kind when it comes to candy...whether they were thrown together like a blind date, or Wonka chose the boy.

Listen, Aitch! No ones reviews can take your place!

[theidolhands]

I just fixed my DAMN TYPOS!! That's what I get for trying to annoy Wonka, at the speed of light, right before I head off to work

[shipandtravel]

Awesome!

Short, but sweet!

[theidolhands]

Thank you! I'll take it!