"The Talk", I send you LOVE in fan fiction form...

[theidolhands]

I wrote this a while ago, but st_minority story "Tell Me You're Here" inspired me to have the courage to share it. Just an alternate universe to mix the bitter with the sweet. I love your writing, but this scene called from my soul one night. It honestly wrote itself (my hand felt possesed) and Mr. Wonka has just told me to post it RIGHT NOW! And, I think

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[tehfluffeh]

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My favorite part of the story (and most of other readers' favorite parts as well, I believe) would have to be the interaction between Wonka and Charlie, though. I love the way you managed to bring out the light, almost innocent relationship between the two so well, and yet still manage to leave that small hint that perhaps, just perhaps one of them may have feelings for the other than run much deeper than just plain, platonic friendship.

Charlie snatching away the telescope and Wonka's offense to that action was classic - I so could imagine that happening! It too shows how at ease Charlie must be with Wonka to be able to treat the man in such a casual, friendly manner - especially knowing how intimidating Wonka can be at times. And later on in the story, when Wonka is confronting Charlie about what's bothering him - I absolutely loved the way you treated that scene. Charlie's hesitation and nervousness, Wonka's fear at hurting the younger boy - very well done, indeed. I also adore your description of Wonka's face -

His cheeks and face were slightly ruddy, thick brown eyelashes sticking together. Mr. Wonka was a little drawn on himself now, mirroring the child-like posture that Charlie had taken on.

Thick brown eyelashes, ruddy cheeks...my, now that is something I'm just dying to see! He must have looked ever-so delicious then, dear Willy...err, but I'm going off the subject here. Anyhow, I like how you have managed to portray Wonka's childishness in this small section here. I imagine Wonka, for all his age and accomplishments, to be terribly innocent, really, when it comes to matters of the heart and body - perhaps even more so than Charlie, and your writing fits into my idea of him perfectly. I also like to think of him as extremely emotionally fragile, and always under the constant fear that one day, all that he holds dear to him (Charlie, the Buckets, and his slowly growing relationship with them) will be snatched away from him, because of some sort of small error on his part. And you have gotten all of that nailed down to a T. Excellent. :)

Wow...seems that I myself have developed a habit of babbling nowadays, huh? Hope that left plenty of reading material for you! And I hope fervently that that read wasn't too dull for you. ;)