Muse crit!

[twonations]

• No pointless comments. Telling someone you love them is cute, but not a critique. Tell them what they are doing right and why. I will delete threads that are just pointless. So no going "omg your muse compliments mine so well, they're perfect together.", or "My only critique is that you need to be around more."
• No bashing. Please keep your

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[soulsfriday]

✿ Rakuen-yodan
muse(s): soulsfriday

Please critique muse character negatively only if you're familiar with the real. Feel free to let me know about my writing, or anything else I might be doing wrong.

[soulsfriday]

Oi :p Aa, but thank you! It makes me happy to hear that.

I don't know how she manages that. I guess when you're weird enough to not care about any social protocols, you end up breaking down any type of wall.

[soulsfriday]

Chiaki is beyond words. I know she's had some rough times in the past but she feels like a fleshed out and real person to us. She has her flaws, her good times, her bad times and all those things in between. That makes her seem very real. She also has an older feeling about her that a lot of muses lack. Even when she's being silly there's this idea of another Chiaki hiding underneath and just waiting to be discovered. My muse would like to be able to learn more about her and just grow along with her.

She very quickly became very important to him.

[byungari]

✿ sideqwest
muse(s): kyaoh

This would be me. ♡

[cryptologist]

How does one critique perfection? I think there are a lot of things about Byunghun the real and the muse that many people would not pick up on. I think the part about him that is done best is that he has a lot of sides and even though he is very open he is not stagnant in character. He continues to grow even if that is just what I notice when he is talking to Myungsoo.

[songsheet]

...Sigh. Byunghun, Byunghun. Woohyun loves the kid even if he wants to jack him up a lot of the time. He wanted to stand out to him and be the difficult hyung since everyone takes to him so easily and kind of in a sense, ~spoils~ him, but while Woo tries to have his own game - Byunghun beats him at it and ends up frustrating/confusing him easily. Which I think is a pretty good thing! Though, he was really :S ... :'( ... >:'( the other night with the Niel comment! Byunghun is a cute kid who has a really welcoming personality and it is pretty easy to become attached to him~ He has all the dynamics of a teen that I believe he tosses out fairly well at all the right moments

[dolcevie]

Oh my god. ♥ where do I even start? I'm so glad that these two got to meet and talk, both irl and muse-wise, and Jiyong loves having him to talk to often (he gets a lot of laughs out of it too). I'm not the most knowledgeable when it comes to Teen Top in general, but I love the way you portray L.Joe, because it just seems to genuine and real, and both of us enjoy talking to him so much. I'd say don't ever change, but L.Joe's constantly growing, so I guess I'd say - don't stray far from that path? haha ^^;

(Also, I haven't forgotten about the scenes I promised! I'm so so so sorry about not being able to get back to you on them ;;)

[cryptologist]

✿ Sideqwest
muse(s): lovethismoment

[songsheet]

Myungsoo and Woohyun hardly talk at all, so... I will try my best here

[cryptologist]

I am hoping that they will get the chance to talk more. Myungsoo tries to IM all of his bandmates at least everyday but sometimes he misses them.

I am glad that the sneaky side comes through as well. I was worried people would start to only notice the mysterious and thoughtful when he is still playful and sneaky too. ♥ I really have no excuse for him excusing himself from the outing except for a headache. He will be participating and if they were to ever return to the dorm he was going to enjoy those watermelons. ^^ He could talk to Byunghun without leaving his book. So it was not choosing one over the other. I hope that he gets to spend plenty of time with Infinite and also more time socializing with Woohyun.

[howonton]

myungsoo!

it took a while for these two to talk, and i'm very glad they did~. i'm even more glad they moved past casual conversation into a scene, haha, so i hope there will be more of that.

still haven't gotten to know this muse that well, but we like him already! at first (mostly before we were able to scene), i thought we'd only get to see that mysterious, sometimes off-putting side of myungsoo, but we're very glad to catch his subtle quirky, kooky and bratty side, too! we hope he'll also open up to the rest of the guys slowly, and we also look forward to that!

[yeors]

✿ sideqwest
muse(s): sungyeor

Anything! If Yeol is too annoying, you can put that down too! We'll try and tone it down...

[songsheet]

I love Sungyeol, oh man. Before I joined, I was really excited to see how Sungyeol would take to Woohyun and I was seriously pleased. ♥ fff, I am trying to think of how to word this because I suck at it, honestly. I mean, I guess what I'm trying to say is that you play him so well that I feel a lot of comfort playing Woo when he is around? They really bounce off of one another amazingly well to me, idk. Woohyun likes to abuse him, but likes to be around him too because Sungyeol takes to his humor and annoying habits the best haha. I don't have anything bad to say! I do get :c when he disappears randomly, but I know that's not something intentional!

[cryptologist]

Sungyeol is so annoying that even the sound of his breathing -- I do not mean that. I am actually having a hard time with what to say because they have not interacted nearly enough. I think that he and Myungsoo play well off of each other even if it mostly is consisting of them being a brat to one another. I might have more to say after they spend more time together. He is always interesting to watch interact with others.

[howonton]

as with all muses of yours i haven gotten to play with, i find them amazing T_T i am sorry i can't give much criticism. maybe... more scenes! yes. that would be something XD.

i want to see more of what's behind sungyeol. i think hoya has seen the serious side very few times, so we want to know what's going on behind the whines and the jokes! (we really love those, though T_T so don't stop).. and most of all, it looks like you're having fun playing him XD so that's really cool. idk what else, ilu. whatever else you want to know, i can tell you!

[bukeo]

✿ sideqwest
muse(s): bukeo

[byungari]

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