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slave_o_spike

"Death Does Not Become Him" Chapter 5 Orlibean

Jan 30, 2008 19:15

So here it is.

BTW, Griffon, Joe and I saw Rambo last weekend. It was okay. Only, I think there was more blood and gore than in Peter Jackson's Braindead.

Title: Death Does Not Become HimPairing: Orlibean ( Read more... )

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simplyshanni January 31 2008, 08:19:56 UTC

Hey there Sweetie ( ... )

slave_o_spike February 3 2008, 18:25:31 UTC

Okay...now I can focus on your fb, which I love immensely ( ... )

doylebaby January 31 2008, 13:20:14 UTC

This was just beautiful. I laughed so hard at their antics at getting to each other. Then there was the hot sex and after that the 's awkwardness, so Sean's demise is to take place in the kitchen...

Seeing Eric the way Orlando sees him is horrible, I can understand his odd behaviour there.

Looking forward to the next update, hon, this is just awesome!

slave_o_spike February 3 2008, 03:00:51 UTC

LOL! It just seemed like that was how the first time for them would be, ya know?

And actually the demise would be in the living room (in front of the fireplace).

Thank you! I'm glad you're having fun with this!

amygirl January 31 2008, 13:58:11 UTC

Oh what a completely amazing chapter and soooo long. Love the first part of the date the teasing and the interplay and just...everything.

Then there was the hotness...loved that too of course... *snerks*

Poor Orli needing to tell him even if it means Sean thinking he's crazy and loosing him.

And Eric...oh gods...I have a bad feeling about this fire I want to stop him from going... :-/

Loved and adored this soooo much.

slave_o_spike February 3 2008, 03:04:19 UTC

Thank you! And yep - it was a long one! About 3x longer than the other chapters. I was actually considering breaking it into two. Glad I didin't.

Glad it came off as hot. I sometimes worry that I write sex like a Mapquest print out. LOL!

And yeah, Orli wants to tell Sean, but he doesn't want to appear crazy.

Thank you again!!! :)

tdorian January 31 2008, 14:09:49 UTC

Wow that's the best chapter so far ! I've laughed so hard once again thanx to you my dear Maria.I'm now totally smitten with Orlando ! although Sidney Poitier coming to diner is one of my fantasy...lol Everything was perfect here and you even made me hungry in the first part !Whe is the next update ? I'm like Sean...I have a problem with the earth's rotation.eh eh...Aida

slave_o_spike February 3 2008, 03:53:35 UTC

You're smitten with Orli? I actually managed to get you to like him?

Woo Hoo! I'm good! :)

Hungry for hens? Bacon wrapped scallops? Sean and Orli? LOL!

More to come soon. This next chapter will be just as long. Thank you Aida!!!!! *smooches you*

krazykitten46 January 31 2008, 14:24:52 UTC

*giggles* I know I shouldn't be laughing but I think the sex will kill Sean before the robber. Sean is really gone to put up with Orlando's bizarre behavior.

On a more serious note, I think I can see the reason for Orlando's actions. He hesisated when he first touched Sean's chest as if he exprected to feel the bullet wounds as well as see them and then he was wiping Sean's imaginary blood off of him. I was thinking that the passion pushed the visions into the background but they came back.

Fascinating story.

bon

slave_o_spike February 3 2008, 03:55:34 UTC

LOL! Yeah - their sex can kill! :)

Exactly! The first time Orli touched Sean, he was happy he wasn't having the visions. And yeah, the nervousness of the date made Orli think about other things but the visions, but when he got comfortable enough, WHAM! They came back.

Thank you!!!!