3276: A Snake on the Move - Zelena Snape/Prince

[pottersues]

Here is day five.
-Nine full days until the fanfic contest. starts.
-I've possibly posted this before.
- For our Flash Back Sue we have Trinity Snape.

TITLE: A Snake on the Move
PERPETRATOR:
SUE-O-METER:
COVER/BANNER ART: It is a clip of their avatar, which happens to be a gaming controler.
SUMMARY:”"Look at the teachers pet everyone!" "More

Comments

[beacon80]

What exactly has her father been doing with Dumbledore? Dumbledore hasn't even started making his plans yet. There aren't any Death Eaters to spy on.

[yemi_hikari]

I don't think we should be surprised that the Suethor forgot that little detail as she forgot the detail about Snape and Lily. Then again... the Sue may be Harry's half sister. Not sure which one is worse.

[yemi_hikari]

I don't like it when Suethor's go out of their way to let their readers know how special their character is. Both the author's note and sorting hat scream "look at me, aren't I special". Some of the writers who do this do it because they aren't getting the attention they deserve and are trying to get it through the wrong means. Some of the writers who do this do it because they aren't getting the attention they think they deserve. I prefer dealing with the first kind because they're open to criticism... but the second... gosh... if you don't give them the attention they think they deserve or their story deserves they blow up. I'll have to think about reviewing this one if nobody else does...

[afleur_de_lis]

I don't see why the two of us can't send her a critique. I mean, she does need it... even if she doesn't want it and will blow up.

[yemi_hikari]

I need to think awhile how I want to word it. :D

[afleur_de_lis]

The one thing that I don't really like about this particular character is the fact that she practically hogs Hermione's role in the story. I mean. There are other ways for your character to be smart/intelligent, but taking over another character's role is not one of them.

Then there is the fact that she seems to think that her character is so special compared to the other characters. We understand that she is Snape's daughter, but what does it mean when the author says that she is like her snake, rare?

Honestly, this story doesn't make any sense. It really doesn't.

[yemi_hikari]

I chalk it up to the writer wanting their character to be special not realizing that making their characters perfect and the best has been over done and the character ends up not being special. Instead they don't belong.

[darth_gojira]

Dear lord. Snape SPAWNED.

(Ron should have said this in the fic, now that I think about it)