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[pottersues]

TITLE: Torment
PERPETRATOR: Endless Torment
SUE-O-METER:

Comments

[beacon80]

Couple of other complaints:

1) Snape has a long running grudge against James. James would never accept him as his child's godparent, and Snape would cleatly never accept it either. Just look how he treats Harry!

2) Assuming Snape was Amaryllis's godfather, he wouldn't greet her as "brat."

3) Amaryllis and Harry Potter... really? The same parents that named their son "Harry" ("nasty, common name") named the other kid Amaryllis?

[lian_hua]

Maybe the Suethor wanted to keep the flower-theme (Lily, Petunia, Rose). But no common name like Daisy or Margaret would do for the magnificent Sue.

[beacon80]

If I ever write a fic where Harry has a sister*, I would definitely name her "Daisy."

* I moved past fanfiction, and even if I did, I see little storytelling potential in giving Harry a sister, so this will never happen.

[eleen_moon]

God, that dialogue. Back and forth and back and forth. Exhausting.

[queen_islanzadi]

You know, this seems to happen an awful lot. Why would a couple who name one child Harry James name the other Amaryllis Le? The only canonically fitting part of that name is Ann.

HAIR: "unlike her parents and brother her hair was straight"
Don't James and Harry both have straight hair? Messy, yes, but straight?

EYES: "amethyst colored eyes"
And here was me thiking that she'd likely have hazel eyes (James' were hazel, right?), or possibly green. Potentially brown, blue or grey, and there is a slight chance they could be a purple-ish shade of blue due to recessive genes, but it's not likely.

MARKINGS: She "had inherited her father's pureblood features and lightly tanned skin".
What are pureblood features? Does she mean features that are a trait to the Potters?

She is Snape's goddaughter.
WUT. I just can't see Lily and James naming SNAPE godfather.

She is "unlike" a Potter. Her attitude is more "pureblood". She "she was as bad a prankster as her godfather Sirius Black and as cunning, determined, and ambitious as her other godfather

[queen_islanzadi]

Yeah. I was like :S ... D:

[beacon80]

I'm wondering where she got "lightly tanned skin" considering both her parents are British, who (as far as I know) generally aren't known for having skin tan enough to note. None of the Potters or the Evanses are ever described as having tanned skin.

[sandstorm]

This whole story is another example of Trelawney messing up. Her prediction should have been for Voldemort to go after Amy.

[turtle_yurippe]

This story has so much wrong in it I can't even be bothered to comment on it all.
One thing: WHY is this Amaryllis (name fail!) person even there?