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Tales of the Second War: The Night Before

Jan 08, 2007 17:22

Title: Tales of the Second War: The Night Before
Rating: M
Warning:: Brief torture, discussion of rape
Status: Complete
Genre: Romance, Humour, Drama, Angst
Characters: Ron Weasley, Hermione Granger, Harry Potter, Ginny Weasley, Neville Longbottom, Remus Lupin, Ernie MacMillan, Luna Lovegood, Peter Pettigrew, Madeleine Yaxley (OC), Lucius Malfoy ( Read more... )

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Ron and Hermione pica_scribit January 8 2007, 23:21:53 UTC

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Re: Ron and Hermione saraste_impi May 5 2007, 22:13:03 UTC

Oh, it was just marvelous! I giggled muchly, as I think I was supposed to do. Oh, poor them. *giggle* And oh my, must have been my first non-slash HP fic! XD

Re: Ron and Hermione pica_scribit May 5 2007, 22:16:52 UTC

Hee! Thank you! I usually write slash, but every now and then, I delve into a little het. The "Ron and Hermione's really awkward first time" bunny was nibbling at my brain for ages before I wrote this. There's going to be a Harry/Ginny chapter and a Remus/Hermione chapter (yeah, I know...weird), and maybe some others, but I don't know who else to cover yet. The Weasley twins get their version told as well, but it's as part of a longer story called The Power of Two.

Re: Ron and Hermione rissabby July 3 2007, 20:41:51 UTC

Oh dear. They are so not ready. Although, they have good sensible attitudes. Hermione should have done a little more research and brought some firewhiskey.

I've got the movie PoA playing in the background, and I think you've got the voices down very well, especially Ron's.

The other 'noises' they hear are first coming from the floor below and, at the end, are coming from the floor above. I couldn't tell if that was an error or if you meant that they were surrounded by people having sex.

This was sweet and funny and sad. I think it's good for us (adult readers especially) to remember how young these heros are.

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Brave pica_scribit July 3 2007, 04:47:04 UTC

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Re: Brave pica_scribit July 4 2007, 15:53:49 UTC

Thank you. It's the first time I've written his point of view, but I recently fell in love with his character. It took me a while to get his "voice" down right, but I think it came out pretty well, considering.

Re: Brave nathaniel_hp July 4 2007, 16:55:22 UTC

Ooh, I like this. I am very fond of Neville. And about time for Neville to realise that he is worthy. He deserves it.

I like the Marauder ship references, although I can't really see Remus or Sirius scratching hearts into their headboards.

Now, I would like to know who is with Remus ;-)

In any case, a sweet little story.
Thanks for sharing!

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Ready pica_scribit July 3 2007, 04:48:42 UTC

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Re: Ready binzer611 July 3 2007, 06:45:14 UTC

Oh my goodness...I just read them both, Ready and Awkward, and I loved them! Such a contrast....I laughed so hard at Ron and Hermione, and then the conversation between Ginny and Harry threw me for a loop. I want to know when you'll continue, I need more!! I rarely even ready fanfiction...

Re: Ready pica_scribit July 3 2007, 14:54:26 UTC

Thank you. I really hope "Ready" worked, but I'm still undecided. I am trying to set up some postwar fic involving Neville/Harry/Ginny, and I needed this conversation to occur naturally between Harry and Ginny. I might have to look at the story again later to see if it looks out of place or out of character. If you are interested, this is the scene I wrote wherein Neville kissed Harry.

Re: Ready rissabby July 3 2007, 21:01:36 UTC

Typo alert:
I thought I had fantacised every possible aspect... This should be 'fantasized'. Unless it's different in Brit-speak.

Just got a phone call, will have to review later. Ginny wasn't a virgin, right?

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Lucky pica_scribit July 3 2007, 04:49:17 UTC

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Re: Lucky tetsubinatu August 7 2007, 11:40:32 UTC

That was touching - and oddly hot - and oh that last line just popped my brain! *giggle* Thanks!

Re: Lucky pica_scribit August 7 2007, 11:58:49 UTC

*grin* Glad you enjoyed it. I've never written Remus/Hermione before, and I doubt I ever will again, but I thought just once wouldn't hurt. :p

Re: Lucky amightypenguin August 8 2007, 00:28:13 UTC

ooooooooooooo! So cool! I love RL/Hr and this was great! I'm all a flutter :)

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Alive pica_scribit August 20 2007, 20:17:24 UTC

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Re: Alive tiggothy August 20 2007, 21:24:47 UTC

Mmm.... I just adore how you capture the characters in the scene and the way you craft your phrases :-) It's wonderfully sweet, but nowhere near sickeningly so, as it could have easily been with a less skilled writer (if that doesn't sound like a backhanded-compliment, because it's really not intended as such! *worries*)

Re: Alive pica_scribit August 20 2007, 21:30:37 UTC

*grin* Thank you! It's my first time writing either of these characters, so I mostly let them decide what they were going to do. For a while I wondered if this would earn more than a PG rating, but both Ernie and Luna seemed contented to take things slowly.

Re: Alive mokurable August 21 2007, 00:19:16 UTC

I thought on and off whether to write you a comment or not, but, what the heck. I just do it.

The reason I read your fanfiction was the first few lines I could read. And I though they were so very well written, so detailed, so beautiful, that I just had to read it.

I don't care much about either Ernie or Luna (though I do like Luna Oo) but anyway:

Your writting style stays the same: very well, fluent read, beautiful words and pictures forming in my head, especially when the room changed I was entranced. It was so... so... yeah, well beautiful!

I really envy your writing style, I doubt I could have done so well in German, let alone English.

The story, and this is my opinion, was not breathtaking. It was very nice, calm, maybe it's just me and all, but I didn't understand Ernie suddenly confessing his love.

Maybe I don't understand the story? That might be the case. I tend to be rather slow. But still, beautiful writing style. I enjoied reading it.

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