Rawhide Chapter 9

[petitemiel]

Title: Rawhide
Author: PetiteMiel
Pairing: Jack/Ennis
Rating: NC-17(eventually)
Warning: Contains harsh language, violence, m/m sexual encounters.
Disclaimer: All characters from Brokeback Mountain belong to Ann Proulx. I am just borrowing them and make no money from their use. No copyright infringement is intended. All other characters are mine

Comments

[anonymous]

I really love this story. It is paced really well. I think Ennis does need to take his time coming to terms with wanting Jack. It is just so sad that Jack is so young and needs to be accepted so badly and the one person he cares about is rejecting him :(. our poor Jackie. Ennis will get there though.

I'm worried about Barnes seeing them talk - a confrontation would be a major setback for Ennis at this point...Plus, I dont want my boys getting hurt.

Very Good!

[sienata]

Hey - i'm still totally loving this story. I read your author's note with total sympathy. I get that in all of my stories as well. Everyone is eager to read the good stuff, ME TOO!!, and it's so much fun to write, but i think very few of us actually want it before it's time. We just like to whine and beg!! That's why I write scenes like you hay loft scene, and fantasy scenes, so that we get some of that along the way, without jumping ahead of what's reasonable in the story

Re: Very Good!

[petitemiel]

J. dropped some trash on the ground in one chapter while kissing H. I got flack about him littering. So in a later chapter, after they did the nasty out in nature, J. tossed his soiled clean-up tissue into the grass, thinking to himself that they were biodegradable and would disintergrate with the next rain.I honestly laughed out loud at this comment. Thanks for sharing that experience and your POV on detail oriented readers. The lantern discussion does give me pause and has made me realize I need to think of how someone who hasn't done the research etc. will see the scene. Just because I felt it was safe doesn't mean the reader will since they might not have the same info I do

Re: Very Good!

[sienata]

Gentleman's time!!!! I've never heard that phrase before, but I love it, and we always love our Gentleman's Time in stories!! Very nice, can't wait for more. S!

Re: Very Good!

[lawgoddess]

Sienna, this is hysterical. I remember Jack dumping his plate on the ground in Boys of Blue Ridge! And it bothered me that a nice boy like Jack was littering, LOL!

And I almost mentioned it to you, but then I remembered IT"S A FICTIONAL STORY!
With fictional characters! So no litter was actually dumped!

Too funny that people called you out on this! You made me laugh. Big hugs. Barbara

[neverdone39]

This story has so quickly become one of my favorites.
I agree about the pacing being so important to a story; and you do a great job with it.

Ennis felt something for him that was clear.

“Ya didn’t do nothing wrong Jack. It’s just...this thing it...it just can’t happen between us that’s all.”

He knew Ennis cared for him; it was the one thing in the world he was sure of

At least now Jack knows why Ennis behaves the way he does. Now he knows Ennis has the same feelings for him - a comforting thought. As long as they know, it's ok to have them struggling with their issues, if this makes any sense, lol.

Looking forward to more, as always.

[lawgoddess]

I love this story. It is so different from anything else out there. You do longing very well, and I like the descriptions of the surroundings. Excellent. Thanks. Brbara

[nstarr]

"He clutched at the blanket, his neck arched and his lips parted, the image of Jack’s eyes staring back at him making him quake."

That sentence was utter perfection!! I'm loving this story!! Can't wait to read more!