Team Jon: A Calm Sea Does Not Make a Skilled Sailor

[danimpa]

Title: The Salty Sea Wench
Team: Jon
Prompt: A Calm Sea Does Not Make a Skilled Sailor
Rating: R
Warnings: Oral sex, boy kissing, slight angst, overusage of the F word (blame Gerard)
Pairing: Jon/Spencer, Ryan/Brendon
Summary: Jon is content with his job in the little coastal town with his regular customers and easy orders, but when a strange

Comments

[gingerrstar]

they say that things are always better the second time around, and that is totally true.

i love all of the different personalities in this. and even though i am not ever going to be a jon/spencer girl, (seriously, so straight it's ridiculous) your jon/spencer works very well.

i love the world that you created, kind of this sea shanty side town, not really real, but not really fantasy. it was quirky and fun and still had real emotions and issues melted inside.

i still hold that you used this prompt exceptionally well, because you did. even the secondary storyline of ryan and keltie went along with it in that life with keltie was easy, but that didn't mean that ryan was happy, or getting anything out of it.

your brendon is my favorite. he was kind of ridiculous and stupidly precious, just like in canon. and he was a kind of mystery. the characters never did give him enough credit, even though he did have some good things to say.

[nyquil_love]

So, this deserves so much more than this comment, but oh well

[i_heart_cliches]

I absolutely loved this... and I can't tell you all the reasons why because that'd take too long, but just a few things:

1. The setting. Everything took place in the bar. The beginning of it was at the bar, the characters came and left, but it was always in the bar, the same picture. It showed this sort of monotony and redundancy that I think was almost metaphorical for the fishing town itself. There are all these people who "can't get out" of the town at first. They're stuff in the same place, doing the same things, not very exciting things are happen; just as the reader is reading about the same setting, the same characters, always drinking and talking (but I will say that you wrote it excitingly. lol). And then, in the end, everyone is leaving the fishing town, just as everyone has been leaving the bar night after night while Jon always seems to be there. And Jon chooses to stay in the fishing town instead of leaving.

idk, the setting's redundancy just gave me a claustrophobic feeling that really added to message of the fic

[dottyasrabbits]

This was so good. Brilliantly written.

The prompt was used extremely well and there were barely any grammar mistakes.

All in all this is one of the best so far. I loved it.

[justranda]

The first thing I want to say is that bartender!Jon has a spot in my heart. Everytime I listen to Piano Man by Billy Joel, I picture Jon as the bartender. (Even without the fact that Jon is the name of the bartender.><) But now that I'm through with that random fact, on to the rest of my comment