Clarity of Vision, Chapter 30/32

[mithen]

Title: Clarity of Vision, Chapter 30/32
Relationship: Thorin/Bilbo
Characters: Bilbo Baggins, Thorin, Kili, Fili, Balin, Dwalin, Dís, Thrain, Thror, Gimli
Fandom: Hobbit
Warnings/Spoilers: None
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 4400
Story Summary: In a Middle-Earth where Erebor never fell, a shadow remains in the heart of the Lonely Mountain. Bilbo Baggins

Comments

[queen0fcups]

So much awesome in one chapter, I CANNOT.

They use the door!! Sneaky pickpocket Dis!!! And I LOVE how you snuck one of the Seven in :3

Bilbo's awe at the beauty of Erebor, at a dwarven kingdom alive, is wonderful.

"Mîn, daughter of Lîn,

YOU SNUCK IN ANOTHER LADY DWARF YES VERY YES

OK the entire passage about Thror lying in filth and wretchedness tore my heart into a million pieces and I think anyone who has had to watch an elder relative fall into decay will feel the same, oh god. I had to skim over a little bit of it actually because the descriptions were so well rendered I couldn't bear it.

"Why, where has that hobbit gone?"

OF COURSE. Thorin's moment of 'I'm not risking anyone I love' with Bilbo sneaking after him is beautiful hobbit love-based stubbornness, it smacks delightfully of "Sam, I'm going to Mordor alone." "Of course you are - and I'm coming with you!"

"Yes," came a voice at the door. "Obey your King."PURE BADASSERY. Though I admit the surrender yourself to justice line comes off as less Thror and more Superman

[mithen]

YOU SNUCK IN ANOTHER LADY DWARF YES VERY YES

Extra lady dwarves for the win! I just find them so fascinating...

Ugh ugh ugh writing Thorin discovering Thror just killed me to write, I had to stop and take a break and cry for a while, I confess it! I'm glad it worked well enough that you had to skim it, if that makes sense...

Hobbits, man--you just can't shake them once they're convinced they're going along with you!

It fell off because it likes to betray its bearers, it sensed someone with a greater potential for evil nearby, and because Thrain smelled like crazy.The semi-sentience of the Ring totally creeps me out! Brrrr. It was like "OH LOOK ONE OF MY KINDRED RINGS ON A CRAZY DWARF

[jestana]

It fell off because it likes to betray its bearers, it sensed someone with a greater potential for evil nearby, and because Thrain smelled like crazy

Did not even think of that, ooh. Yes, good. Me like! *nodnodnod*

[jlvsclrk]

I find myself flailing incoherently with queen0fcups. ^What she said! Magnificent.

[mithen]

Ahhhh, thank you! It was so satisfying to finally get Thorin home... *dances*

[shirebound]

"Kill him!" shrieked Thráin. "Obey your King!"

"Yes," came a voice at the door. "Obey your King."

What a moment! This is one scene your whole story has been leading up to (I suspect at least one more to come), and it was very satisfying indeed.

[mithen]

I'm so glad you liked that moment! Yeah, Thror coming back into his own made me absurdly happy to write. :) We shall see about the future moments--they're all much more quiet and undramatic from here on out, but I'm still dying to get to some of them...

[jestana]

Aw! Thorin! Babby! *clings* At least Thror is better (I hope) and Thorin is back in Erebor with Bilbo. They were just so cute together! Bilbo's comment about Thrain not approving! HEEEE! *bounces*

[mithen]

Thror is definitely better--at least mentally, although the last few years will have taken a terrible physical toll on him. And yes, Bilbo is now considering that he might have some pretty serious in-law problems. *grin* I was really happy to discover they wanted to banter a bit after all the intensity...

[ranger_girl0301]

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!

[mithen]

*happy bounces* Thank you! That was definitely the reaction I was hoping for. *grin*