The end... Part four

[miss_shine]

If your reading this and you like it or don't PLEASE leave some comments, I've written half of the story and I'm trying to decide if its worth finishing. If you want to check out one thru three the links are below, PLEASE leave comments on those as well... Thanks a lot :) I find all of your comments really helpful

Comments

[adira_tam]

this keeps getting better and better..

[miss_shine]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it :)

[noneinnyet]

Does Jack have a Katie-alien-tumor thing? Tosh too?

[miss_shine]

Thanks... for the comment :) please keep reading!!!! You might find your right :)

[jsks]

I am hooked, more please.

[miss_shine]

Thanks alot, I'm glad you like it :)

[mesalline]

Hey, Am I the first one to leave a comment? xD
I think the story's good so far, all though it's very like Dead man walking, or is the story supposed to follow a similar plot line?

Also I think you're making Gwen too hateful, Yes she's annoying in the Show but I think it's too OTT in this story. Sort of makes me want to stop reading. I'm not trying to be nasty with you, I want to be honest with you and I hope you don't take it personally. I'll still read the rest of the fic though because I think you've got a decent story line. If you can fix Gwens character that'd make it better too, for example I don't think Gwen would freak out when Owen was trying to Sedate Jack.

Good luck with the rest of the story.

[miss_shine]

Thanks for the comment, I hadn't realised that it was like dead man walking. I hadn't meant it to be, do you think its like that episode because Owen has death trying to use him as a gateway and you think something is trying to come through Jack and Toshiko, because that is an interesting idea and one I played with for a while... but I have gone in a different direction now and with the coming posts I think you will see that

[ceindreadh]

Okay, this is an interesting fic, and I'm curious as to where it's going to go. But I would recommend that you find a Beta reader to help you out with it, as I noticed a few grammatical/spelling errors that should be fixed.
(e.g. it's drawer, not draw, and in part 3, i'm pretty sure you meant to say Owen was distracted by Gwen and not dissected)

[miss_shine]

Thanks for reading and for commenting. Also thanks for pointing out my spelling mistakes, Dyslexia stikes again :( I do have a beta but no one that is often availible and she often slows me down... I just can't stand waiting for her, especially when the plot bunnies are around. Sorry about my mistakes maybe I'll wait for her before posting again but I just know she is going to take weeks!!!