Fic: why do you make it hard to love you (part two)

[ladysonsie]

Title: why do you make it hard to love you (part two)
Author: ladysonsie
Artist: sweetiejelly
Rating: NC-17
Disclaimer: Everything you are about to read is not real. Fiction, kids. Which means I'm just one big liar. So no offense meant and ohmygod don't sue, plz! I kinda like my things and want to keep them, thanks.
Characters/Pairings: Van/Jake
Word Count: 10.3k

Comments

[secondmezzanine]

“I like you.” Jake downs a shot of the grainy liquid and places the bottle down, skirting it around until the sand makes a cocoon for it to stay upright in.
Okay, so, this is one of the reasons I love you. He says something so simple but it makes my knees go weak, and then you use words that I would never think to use and make them awesome and compelling.

It’s a little sloppy and wet at first, all tongue and teeth, him fighting to open his mouth wider so he can taste Jake. He wonders if Jake can feel his heart beating in his throat as he explores, the flavor of his nerves on the tip of his tongue bursting out. He’s overheated and Jake’s day old scruff is scraping against Van’s jaw, the tiny tingles intensifying everything that much more. Jake pulls at the nape of Van’s neck to bring him impossibly deeper, threading his fingers though his hair and making this hot as fuck moan in the back of his throat that gets the deep satisfaction of Van’s cock.You know, sometimes I marvel at the fact that it’s just these same two guys (and I use

[ladysonsie]

So, I'm not even gonna front or try to act cool. I was talking on skype with sarafim when I got this notification and I might have, like, acted like a slight dork.

I JUST FANGIRL OKAY?

Which, ha. I don't really do! But you know how much I adore your writing so to get this from you just made me all blushy and made this worth it because I kept going back and forth on this story because the boys were a little different than normal

[secondmezzanine]

Oh girlfriend, you make me blush. This is why I love this fandom. Everybody makes me feel all warm and mushy inside, plus cute boys doing sexy things. I love you all so much.

Oh, and I totally didn't mind the coding thing... I just wanted to read it right away so I went ahead and did! It was fine! :) But heck, I'll take the sparkly dildo!!!!

So... I do have a fic ready for posting but I just feel like it's sub-par right now and am scared to post it for fear of people recognizing its sub-parness. But I'm trying to get up the nerve to post it soon! For now let's just let everyone enjoy the dazzlingness (yes it's a word) of THIS fic!

[random_nic]

What she said. :)

[ladysonsie]

Thanks!

[jackie_oh]

Actually, I really, really, really enjoyed Steph's characterization of Jake. She made him into a real person (although, he already very much is, duh!) instead of just a three dimensional character, which is something that a lot of authors fail to do, myself included.

And I loved how big of a jerkbag he was. Mainly because I could really see where he was coming from. The turmoil, all that. I might also be biased because I usually love negative character aspects over positive ones.

[ladysonsie]

Ah, thanks so much, bb. I was worried this would come across in a way where people thought Jake was just an ass so it's nice to hear he came across with more depth than that.

It was just different! And fun to play around with. Less than perfect boys and all that.

But thank you! Lovelovelove you. ♥

[ladysonsie]

Aw, ha. Yeah, I'm behind as well! So that's sweet you came here, hee.

Yeah, I thought that might happen. I really wanted to try something a little different and write the boys not quite as fluffy and this is what came out. Hopefully it was somewhat balanced in the end!

But thank you so much! Glad that you liked it even if it was a little different.

[newhaven183]

really not much left to do but...stand and applaud.

it was that (damn) good!

[ladysonsie]

Oh, thank you so much! What an incredibly lovely comment.

♥

[sweetiejelly]

So, I've only read about half of this when I absolutely fell in love with this piece, but after I read it all last night, I'm even more in awe. You have that voice that just inspires me. The way you say things, like the beer bottle in sand phrase that Mezz quoted, is just so unique and lovely. You have that sort of run-on (but not in an ungrammatical way) of phrasing that makes the mood, like you can't breathe till you read it all. And I just really love that in your writing in general and definitely here.

I've already told you how much I love the pulls back to today, the slow unfolding, not unlike the whole newspaper opening metaphor. And I have to tell you, I love how you ended with tomorrow. Well, of course. Their story goes on. Love that.

Also, it's an Ella word but your sexpertise also shines through. Guh. Just GUH.

Mezz quoted a lot of what I love, but I just also wanted to quote this too:
He takes a brief moment and breathes in the crisp air. He loves so many things about living in Los Angles but nothing will ever come close

[ladysonsie]

Okay, so. We have been commenting on each other's pieces for so long now but you STILL make me so squirmy when you talk like that. Because not only do I love you so much, but your talent really does keep inspiring me each time. And I love that, I love having someone in my life that does that and keeps pushing me in such a creative way.

Anyway, that's to say that this all meant a lot. I know how patient you were because I was so last minute (ha!) and I was nervous for you to read this but you're amazing, and this is lovely and just thank you so much for it all.

And it's funny because sometimes I worry about the run-on thing (not in a grammar sense, just a flow or style thing) so that actually meant a lot to have you say that.

Gah, thank you! So happy you liked it and gosh, so behind myself with reading. Slowly getting there because so many fics! But love you and thank you again for the beautiful art to go with this.

♥