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Fic: why do you make it hard to love you (part two)

Aug 19, 2011 17:57

Title: why do you make it hard to love you (part two)
Author: ladysonsie
Artist: sweetiejelly
Rating: NC-17
Disclaimer: Everything you are about to read is not real. Fiction, kids. Which means I'm just one big liar. So no offense meant and ohmygod don't sue, plz! I kinda like my things and want to keep them, thanks.
Characters/Pairings: Van/Jake
Word Count: 10.3k
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bigbang posting, rps, fanfic, van/jake

Comments 34

seajellybaby August 21 2011, 17:35:26 UTC

Your dialogue is so amazing! The simplest of words make me tingle! This is a great piece of work!

ladysonsie August 31 2011, 07:18:29 UTC

Ha, this made me smile because dialogue is something I'm still trying to become comfortable with! So thank you so much for that.

And thank you so much for reading! ♥

bibong_rocks August 21 2011, 22:11:14 UTC

Okay, this was simply amazing. I love the timeline setup of the story and how it ended with the next day. pure genius! I also like the wedding thing with billy. I swear when I started to read the story I thought it was Jake was getting married not billy.

Anyway I love you work. This was a awesome story to read.

Thanks for sharing it with us.

ladysonsie August 31 2011, 07:32:03 UTC

Ooh, yay! I was hoping you'd think it was Jake, at least for a little bit.

And thank you so much for the rest. I'm really glad the timeline worked and wasn't too confusing and that you enjoyed it!

This was a lovely comment and I appreciate it so much! ♥

indigo_5 August 22 2011, 03:53:57 UTC

I am in love with you. Which you knew already but yeah.

This feedback is not going to be nearly what you deserve, because I seriously loved this to bits and pieces and want to squeal all over you but excuse me because I need to go read this again right now.

But, must quote this:

“I like you.” Jake downs a shot of the grainy liquid and places the bottle down, skirting it around until the sand makes a cocoon for it to stay upright in.

I can't even tell you what exactly it is I love so much about this little portion, but it illustrates everything that is awesome about this fic. The line from Jake, which got me right in the gut. The cuteness of the motion with the bottle, and the perfection of your description of it. The casualness of the whole thing, and how you know Van is freaking the fuck out but we get a delicious little delay from hearing about it because of the bottle thing. Just ALL OF IT. ALL OF IT IS YES.

So um, yeah, you're kind of awesome. Like a lot. *snogs you madly*

♥♥♥♥♥

ladysonsie August 31 2011, 07:39:14 UTC

This was such a nice surprise! I didn't know you were back reading fic so when I got this notification it just made me smile and get stupid happy.

And ohmygosh thank you. Seriously, I'm beyond happy that you enjoyed this. That means so much coming from you.

And I'm kinda amused (in a good way!) that people are quoting that same line/part. I think that's kinda awesome and you all are adorable and too sweet to me.

Anyway, this whole thing made me smile and I love you back and I will snog you ALWAYS AND FOREVER because I can and am good at it.

Hee.

Thanks so much, bb. Love you always. ♥

wheelie47 August 22 2011, 14:43:13 UTC

Love your style of story telling - so descriptive!

Glad Jake came to his senses in the end - kinda wanted to slap there for a bit. BUT yeah they made it in the end. Love how the last part is called tomorrow. Some srsly hot scenes there.

Thanks for sharing!!

ladysonsie August 31 2011, 07:41:57 UTC

Aw, thank you! And ha, yeah. Jake wasn't getting it at first but he just needed a swift kick to get him where he needed to be, hee.

Thank you so much for reading!

crownroyal_51 August 22 2011, 15:16:18 UTC

First I love how this story was structured with the present day woven in along with flashbacks and quotes. I thought it was beautifully done! Also, I'm not used to seeing Jake portrayed as a jerk but you pulled it off without making him unlikable. He was just one mixed up fella. Great job!

ladysonsie August 31 2011, 07:46:49 UTC

Also, I'm not used to seeing Jake portrayed as a jerk but you pulled it off without making him unlikable.

Oh, thank you so much for that. I was quite worried I wasn't doing that and that he'd come off too much like an ass. So to hear he still was likable means a lot. Thank you!

And I'm happy the structure worked and the flashbacks weren't too confusing. You're always so sweet and this meant a lot. Thank you again and I'm happy you enjoyed it!

♥