Evening Hour (nineteenth in the HOUR series)

[kidsnurse]

Title: Evening Hour
Characters: House, Wilson
Rating: PG
Genre: Angst
Word Count: 1100 
Summary: Wilson thinks he's doing fine; House knows better.

The previous vignettes, in order, are: Visiting Hour,  Happy Hour,  Midnight Hour,  Fifty-Minute Hour,  Random Hour,  Painful Hour,  Dark Hour ,  Desperate Hour,  Witching Hour ,  Lonely Hour,  Dinner

Comments

[idonmatrix]

Beautiful. Gut-wrenching. Wow.

[kidsnurse]

Gut-wrenching.

thank you; i really was attempting to portray wilson's jumble of emotions so clearly that the readers would feel them as well. nice to know that you felt it!

[nightdog_barks]

First of all, kidsnurse, let me say how sorry I am that I am so late commenting on this. I was a little busy today but that's no excuse.

So. I really liked this. A lot. I loved the slow buildup to Wilson's breakdown -- because that's what it really was, a breakdown. But he was able to break down because he was safe -- with House. I loved the slow buildup, I loved the opening of the stab wound corresponding with the opening of Wilson's feelings, and I especially loved Wilson's breathing.

That whole bit, about how Wilson had forgotten what it was like to take a deep breath, was just wonderful. It's such a small thing, but it means so much. It is details like this that can make or break a story, and you carried it off wonderfully.

I will be so sorry to see this story end, because I wish it could go on and on. You have done a masterful job.

*grins widely* See? I told you you could do it. *hugs*

[romeo46]

Echoing NDB, because frankly they write better than I do. I will be sad to see this series end. And now that I am not hungry when reading this can I say that this story was like a hurricane, you have the buildup- some stormness, then it seems like the eyewall is coming over and now we have the other side of the eyewall. Maybe now the storm will pass. So, in true Kid'sNurse tradition, will there be a sequel?

[kidsnurse]

true Kid'sNurse tradition, will there be a sequel?

arrgh! there's that... scary word again!!!

*cowers in corner* ;)

[sy_dedalus]

Wow, nice. He didn't know what he needed and House did for once. Beautiful. I love keeping Wilson's perspective at the end so that the focus is on the great unburdening he's undergone. He needed that. I needed that. Excellent. Cheers.

[kidsnurse]

He needed that. I needed that.

and so did i. and--immediately after typing all that out at full speed, what i needed was a nap! it was... draining... to write--in a satisfying, almost cathartic way.

[kidsnurse]

the mention of the concerned House being "more work", but he's touched in a way as well as annoyed

i think he's definitely touched! how could he not be? concerned!house is just so endearing!! :)

[mystcphoenxcafe]

Greetings!

Trust House to know the value of anger. And the gruff caring that causes him to poke until the wound drains.

Btw, am I just suffering from lack of sleep or did you really, permanently change tenses a few chapters back???

*puts Muse to work on titles* b/c if there's only one more part, I'm not entirely sure it would be finished yet.... (fortunately, you don't seem to mind others playing in your versions of the sandbox)

Reading on and Musing,
-Katrina

[kidsnurse]

*puts Muse to work on titles* b/c if there's only one more part, I'm not entirely sure it would be finished yet.... (fortunately, you don't seem to mind others playing in your versions of the sandbox)

ack! i'm reading, and responding to, your comments out of order, apparently! i interpreted your comment at the conclusion of Bittersweet Hour to mean that you were suggesting i continue the story. sorry for the misinterpretation!

as to others playing in the Hour 'verse, i'm assuming you noticed the lovely contributions from blackmare_9 and nightdog_barks. what you may not realize is that those are two of my own favorite writers, with whom I have a significant level of experience and trust. both of them asked permission and then sent their work to me for approval and review -- never with the assumption that what they had written would be used in any way

[mystcphoenxcafe]

Greetings

[kidsnurse]

thanks so much for understanding! and i really am flattered; i hope (and feel) that there may, in fact, be a collaboration for us in the offing [although i also sense that you're far more skilled at this writing thing than i!].