Evening Hour (nineteenth in the HOUR series)

[kidsnurse]

Title: Evening Hour
Characters: House, Wilson
Rating: PG
Genre: Angst
Word Count: 1100 
Summary: Wilson thinks he's doing fine; House knows better.

The previous vignettes, in order, are: Visiting Hour,  Happy Hour,  Midnight Hour,  Fifty-Minute Hour,  Random Hour,  Painful Hour,  Dark Hour ,  Desperate Hour,  Witching Hour ,  Lonely Hour,  Dinner

Comments

[nightdog_barks]

First of all, kidsnurse, let me say how sorry I am that I am so late commenting on this. I was a little busy today but that's no excuse.

So. I really liked this. A lot. I loved the slow buildup to Wilson's breakdown -- because that's what it really was, a breakdown. But he was able to break down because he was safe -- with House. I loved the slow buildup, I loved the opening of the stab wound corresponding with the opening of Wilson's feelings, and I especially loved Wilson's breathing.

That whole bit, about how Wilson had forgotten what it was like to take a deep breath, was just wonderful. It's such a small thing, but it means so much. It is details like this that can make or break a story, and you carried it off wonderfully.

I will be so sorry to see this story end, because I wish it could go on and on. You have done a masterful job.

*grins widely* See? I told you you could do it. *hugs*

[romeo46]

Echoing NDB, because frankly they write better than I do. I will be sad to see this series end. And now that I am not hungry when reading this can I say that this story was like a hurricane, you have the buildup- some stormness, then it seems like the eyewall is coming over and now we have the other side of the eyewall. Maybe now the storm will pass. So, in true Kid'sNurse tradition, will there be a sequel?

[kidsnurse]

true Kid'sNurse tradition, will there be a sequel?

arrgh! there's that... scary word again!!!

*cowers in corner* ;)

[kidsnurse]

you've only promised ONE sequel so far, how much can one more hurt

**now cowering in corner and rocking whilst playing with sharp, shiny objects*

;-)

[nightdog_barks]

Don't be frightened...here have some cookies :)

[kidsnurse]

I was a little busy today

quite all right; i had a wee black raincloud over my head all day, thus was... unfit to interact with human beings anyway. today, it's sunny! :)

That whole bit, about how Wilson had forgotten what it was like to take a deep breath

was my own favorite part of this segment; thanks for mentioning it.

I loved the opening of the stab wound corresponding with the opening of Wilson's feelings

happy accident, i guess--as i didn't 'catch' that until you mentioned it. rather like the key thing... sometimes my density astounds even me... sigh.

I told you you could do it.

and votes of confidence from skilled writers like you can make all the difference. thanks! :)