Heehee, I loved this! Poor Link.. doesn't look like he's going to get much studying done. And Lavi was wonderful as always. I could see him getting into the game like that. XDD
(But oh, can I empathize. Minesweeper makes me wants to, um, throw large things. At random passerbys. I FEEL HIS PAIN. ._.')
XD yeah and..it's verrry important too (uh, actually, I don't even know what he's studying XD) Phff well, if he wanted to amuse himself for hours on end *shakes head* I usually lose the game immediately so I pretty much avoid it ^^;
(...*wince* Large stuffed elephant kind of large things?)
Teehee. Maybe he's studying ANTHROPOLOGY. XD ::slapped:: (Me and my non-roommate friend want to take that class, so we're looking into other universities that offer the course. They don't offer it here, unfortunately.. >.>')
Gahh, I don't let how people can play it so much! I get irritated after like, two games, and have to remove myself from the vicinity.
(Large stuffed elephants.. or slightly smaller grand pianos? :D)
it would be ironic, wouldn't it? At this point in time, Link not only gave up minesweeper, but other games like solitaire and spider solitaire, and yeah...
Okay, finally found some time to comment as promised. I like the characterization and mood in this, and your choice of characters (obviously), and you really conveyed Link's annoyance well. I also liked the tension in the scene with Madarao. <3
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I'm glad you liked it XD (all things considering...er like right now--I'm playing Madarao in an RP I'm doing so I wanna get GOOD at him, y'know? *laugh*) as for Link *sigh* he's still iffy with me but glad you liked him XD
Glad you liked that line XD *again doesn't remember writing it but whatever*
and now for teh CC addressment
About the He/She placement--I...yeah...I Do do that a lot. And I really don't mean to XD (I mean it CAN get confusing) though most of the short things on here--I try to address the names first (thankfully I remembered to on this piece) but...I guess...I rely heavily on Characterization? That's probably really bad but I view everyone as different--so to me it's easy to tell who's who by their actions XD though I do also do it sometimes because I WANT to be unclear (I WANT people to go back and re-read and go 'oh it's him?') though again...yeah I need to really watch it XD I don't think you're the first person to bring that up, actually *blinks* (though the
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Sorry for the late reply. It was the last week of school, and a number of my days were booked. *still has some assignments and things to finish* Let me write my thoughts.
If you didn't mean to do it, well, that's why it helps to have readers point out things the writer might not see. Of course you can tell who's who--you're the one writing it--but there are times when it's not actually clear in the text. I absolutely agree with using characterization to establish who you're talking about, which can be vital in first-person POV fics, but the end result is that the reader should know who they're reading about, right? In which case, you might as well write their name in paragraph 1 instead of paragraph 5
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It's fine, I kinda figured XD (it's this week or last week that's usually the last week of Uni for most people *her last day was Friday, though since she didn't have a Final, it was thursday
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(But oh, can I empathize. Minesweeper makes me wants to, um, throw large things. At random passerbys. I FEEL HIS PAIN. ._.')
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(...*wince* Large stuffed elephant kind of large things?)
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Gahh, I don't let how people can play it so much! I get irritated after like, two games, and have to remove myself from the vicinity.
(Large stuffed elephants.. or slightly smaller grand pianos? :D)
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haha, I can totally see Lavi doing something like that and annoying poor Link to no end. xD
by the way, I never really understood how to play Minesweeper...
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Don't worry. I don't really know either XD
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Okay, finally found some time to comment as promised. I like the characterization and mood in this, and your choice of characters (obviously), and you really conveyed Link's annoyance well. I also liked the tension in the scene with Madarao. <3 ( ... )
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I'm glad you liked it XD (all things considering...er like right now--I'm playing Madarao in an RP I'm doing so I wanna get GOOD at him, y'know? *laugh*) as for Link *sigh* he's still iffy with me but glad you liked him XD
Glad you liked that line XD *again doesn't remember writing it but whatever*
and now for teh CC addressment
About the He/She placement--I...yeah...I Do do that a lot. And I really don't mean to XD (I mean it CAN get confusing) though most of the short things on here--I try to address the names first (thankfully I remembered to on this piece) but...I guess...I rely heavily on Characterization? That's probably really bad but I view everyone as different--so to me it's easy to tell who's who by their actions XD though I do also do it sometimes because I WANT to be unclear (I WANT people to go back and re-read and go 'oh it's him?') though again...yeah I need to really watch it XD I don't think you're the first person to bring that up, actually *blinks* (though the ( ... )
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If you didn't mean to do it, well, that's why it helps to have readers point out things the writer might not see. Of course you can tell who's who--you're the one writing it--but there are times when it's not actually clear in the text. I absolutely agree with using characterization to establish who you're talking about, which can be vital in first-person POV fics, but the end result is that the reader should know who they're reading about, right? In which case, you might as well write their name in paragraph 1 instead of paragraph 5 ( ... )
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