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finnimbrun

More kinkmeme stuff, hoshit.

Feb 20, 2009 15:47

In the Middle

Rating: Mature
Genre: Drama. Not sure if the timeline is anywhere near right, but eh!
Characters/Pairing: Chiyo/Tsunade
Spoilers: I don't think there are any.
Disclaimer: Naruto is the property of Kishimoto Masashi. Standard fanfic disclaimers apply.
Notes: This is yet another 'fic I wrote which sprang out of redbrunja 's epic kinkmeme.

( This is how we bleed. )

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helicopini February 21 2009, 08:24:26 UTC

I'm too tired to review properly, and I did on AIM anyway...

BUT. For posterity.

I really enjoyed this one. It was emotionally real in a way that I don't see very often. It also showed, imo, not only an understanding of women as human beings, but an actual interest in understanding them. I won't reprise my entire pet rant about this, but fandom does have a problem with female characters sometimes. So this was very refreshing and I liked it a lot.

hieronymousb February 22 2009, 09:24:38 UTC

Awww, thanks, man. I appreciate it. :)

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hieronymousb February 22 2009, 09:23:26 UTC

LOL WOW, someone actually read this? I'm honestly a little amazed, but thanks, man. I deliberately went through the kinkmeme and picked a few of the pairings that, er, I figured no one else would write. XD

tl__dr February 22 2009, 09:38:29 UTC

ew_younerd linked me to this and I'm about to read it with so much gusto and excitement you don't even know but before I do I just need to leave you a gratuitous comment about how FUCKING EXHILARATED I am that somebody wrote Chiyo/Tsunade! THEY ARE DEFINITELY ONE OF MY NARUTO OTPS I NEVER EXPECTED TO SEE WRITTEN, TWO OF MY MOST FAVORITE CHARACTERS, SO HOT TOGETHER, I'LL STOP CAPSING AT YOU BUT THANK YOU IN ADVANCE FOR WRITING THIS. Ahhhhh *___*

hieronymousb February 23 2009, 00:32:52 UTC

AGH OMG HOLY SHIT YOU LEFT ME A BIG GIGANTIC REVIEW; THANK YOU SO MUCH. ♥ I will reply to all of it when I get a chance, but THANK YOU IN ADVANCE, WOW. :) I AM DEEPLY HONOURED.

1/2 tl__dr February 22 2009, 11:38:06 UTC

She thinks of Jiraiya, that big idiot. When did he ever abide by that rule? When did Orochimaru? Or maybe Orochimaru has. Maybe he has too perfectly, she thinks with a flash of unnamed ache; no, never mind. Damn, she's got to get to work.

Ah, such a beautiful and contextual stray line. I love the interpretation of Orochimaru here - somebody who represses his human side to the point of psychopathy, it's so apt.

Also I haven't even gotten to the slash yet but I'm already finding Tsunade's bubbling-beneath-the-surface anger the hottest thing on earth.

A child such as me could run her fist straight through your stomach, Tsunade thinks. Bites her lips and holds her hands behind her back.

Just

Wants to tear off the ladies' dresses and tell them to get to work. Stop praying. There's a man with his chest open two rooms down.

YES.

And then, enter Chiyo.

The woman doesn't like her. Doesn't respect her. She looks up and down the length of her body severely, and Tsunade feels herself redden, and she can't say why. She must look so ( ... )

2/3 tl__dr February 22 2009, 11:39:16 UTC

But Tsunade, still flush, still certain something was in her drink (did this woman slip her -- but no, that's absurd) beckons -- and Chiyo inches forward, joins her on the bed; hot press of two bodies -- two tools. This nin from Suna has hands harder and more callused than Tsunade's own, and she takes Tsunade's slim fingers and twists them; massages the chakra centres where the muscles have cramped.

Leans down and blows on them, as if they're fresh coals from a flame.

Hell yes. Ninja foreplay. The best kind of foreplay there is. Seriously: this is so weirdly sensual, and so right.

She of the lifeless, dry puppets -- carrying them like she'll someday carry her old bones, if she -- if they -- live long enough for that; drying away in the desert, where the blood and tears evaporate quickly. And those hands which manipulate the strings of the puppets are on Tsunade; they know chakra control, know how to draw these things out.God I just. Maybe I'll just quote back at you EVERY DESCRIPTION OF CHIYO IN THIS FIC, because they're all that ( ... )

3/3 tl__dr February 22 2009, 11:40:34 UTC

I'm afraid to keep c/ping and rambling at you because I think I've probably already exceeded the comment limit AGAIN (after checking: yep, I did), so I'll just jot down some quick thoughts on the rest of this ( ... )

late reply is late pt 3 hieronymousb February 25 2009, 09:32:06 UTC

AWWWW WELL, thank you so much for leaving such a fab set of comments. Yep, this fic was definitely sort of my, I dunno, fanfic-treatise on the idea of Women Talking to Women and Women Sharing Women's Pain and Women Understanding Women. Because, well, here's where I get on my soapbox again, but there's entirely too little of this anywhere in fiction, and especially (unfortunately) in fandom. Women are human beings. They need to talk to one another, and they need to relate to one another. And what's more, fiction, I think, sometimes needs to address and show this, because there are plenty of stories/scenes dealing with men interacting with men or women interacting with men, but women understanding and talking to women (as human beings)? Sadly kind of rare, in my experience.

But yeah, /SOAPBOX. Point being, I do think stories of such a nature can be important and should, sometimes, be written, and it was my pleasure to write it, and I'm glad you enjoyed it so much!

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