More kinkmeme stuff, hoshit.

[finnimbrun]

In the Middle

Rating: Mature
Genre: Drama. Not sure if the timeline is anywhere near right, but eh!
Characters/Pairing: Chiyo/Tsunade
Spoilers: I don't think there are any.
Disclaimer: Naruto is the property of Kishimoto Masashi. Standard fanfic disclaimers apply.
Notes: This is yet another 'fic I wrote which sprang out of redbrunja 's epic kinkmeme.

Comments

2/3

[tl__dr]

But Tsunade, still flush, still certain something was in her drink (did this woman slip her -- but no, that's absurd) beckons -- and Chiyo inches forward, joins her on the bed; hot press of two bodies -- two tools. This nin from Suna has hands harder and more callused than Tsunade's own, and she takes Tsunade's slim fingers and twists them; massages the chakra centres where the muscles have cramped.

Leans down and blows on them, as if they're fresh coals from a flame.

Hell yes. Ninja foreplay. The best kind of foreplay there is. Seriously: this is so weirdly sensual, and so right.

She of the lifeless, dry puppets -- carrying them like she'll someday carry her old bones, if she -- if they -- live long enough for that; drying away in the desert, where the blood and tears evaporate quickly. And those hands which manipulate the strings of the puppets are on Tsunade; they know chakra control, know how to draw these things out.

God I just. Maybe I'll just quote back at you EVERY DESCRIPTION OF CHIYO IN THIS FIC, because they're all that good.

She doesn't, actually, say anything. Just moans. Because kunoichi are taught how to pick flowers, how to disguise themselves; they aren't taught how to fuck men, or women. How to be fucked. How to be fucked over. Just be a weapon. Just remember that. Tsunade squirms on the bed; presses her cheek to the pillow and nearly sobs from the force of it -- as those practised puppeteer's hands inspect and pry open her pussy. As those fingers jab at her; nothing delicate to it, it's almost mechanical, almost an art, as she's pulled and stretched, as she's poked and licked and sucked.

This bit is amazing. I love that the sex is so puppet-esque, that's of course perfect where Chiyo is involved, and I also love all of Tsunade's angry diatribes about just how used she is. It's so her, so apt, and so justified.

Her muscles are as tight and wound up as they ever were after any battle. "Fuck," she grates, as the fingers invade her, drag out her sticky wetness and smear the insides of her thighs with it. She clenches hard. Before she knows it, she's on her hands and knees, with the soles of her feet shoving into the bare mattress, with her body shamelessly open, spread out.

another driveby "THIS IS SO HOT" dkfjksd

Ok and right after that is my favorite bit so far:

Her big tits press against the pillow as she presses her strong arms down on either side of it -- supports her weight with those arms that she's trained to punch through mountains but that forever fall so short of feeling powerful enough to hold everything that's inside her -- and Chiyo pushes up behind her with the ease of someone for whom fucking is just a warm-up.

Just. Every word of this is exactly right, Tsunade's physical power and emotional sense of terrifying vulnerability, of unraveling, and the way Chiyo is just so TOUGH, so hardy, so in control with how open she is about their lack of control.

And goddamn:

The fingers press deep, stretch; the necklace dangles above Tsunade's chest. Her nipples are so hard, the force of this fuck slides her forward until the bed rubs them almost raw and she pants, pants, pants.

is this smut SMOLDERING HOT. Just so raunchy and raw and real, I can feel every slide and twist, it's incredible. I truly never thought I'd get to read fic this hot for my favorite Naruto girlslash pairing, and now you've delivered in a way that's probably going to be eternally unparalleled no matter what. THANK YOU FOR THIS.

3/3

[tl__dr]

I'm afraid to keep c/ping and rambling at you because I think I've probably already exceeded the comment limit AGAIN (after checking: yep, I did), so I'll just jot down some quick thoughts on the rest of this:
- I loved Tsunade's comedown from the sex. This really reads as realer than most femslash sex I've read in...in ages (and I love femslash, and read tons of it, but while the romanticized stuff has its place - heck, that's the sort of thing I write, really - there's nothing like some good, nuanced, rawly sensual porn like this. Just. Sublime). Just the description of that post-orgasm physical equilibrium...yum.
- I love that Chiyo stayed, and let Tsunade pour out all this pain she'd been feeling for so long, and just gently, silently stayed with her. There's a strength and understanding to the interactions between these two women that is even more appealing than the hot hot hot sex, so thank you. This entire thing was just so beautiful.

And I loved the last line.

I obviously can't be very coherent over this, but thank you for bearing with my stream-of-consciousness flailing and thank you thank you THANK YOU for writing this beautifully delicious piece of fanfiction.

late reply is late pt 3

[hieronymousb]

AWWWW WELL, thank you so much for leaving such a fab set of comments. Yep, this fic was definitely sort of my, I dunno, fanfic-treatise on the idea of Women Talking to Women and Women Sharing Women's Pain and Women Understanding Women. Because, well, here's where I get on my soapbox again, but there's entirely too little of this anywhere in fiction, and especially (unfortunately) in fandom. Women are human beings. They need to talk to one another, and they need to relate to one another. And what's more, fiction, I think, sometimes needs to address and show this, because there are plenty of stories/scenes dealing with men interacting with men or women interacting with men, but women understanding and talking to women (as human beings)? Sadly kind of rare, in my experience.

But yeah, /SOAPBOX. Point being, I do think stories of such a nature can be important and should, sometimes, be written, and it was my pleasure to write it, and I'm glad you enjoyed it so much!

late reply is late pt 2

[hieronymousb]

See, and the reason I wrote it as kind of raunchy is because -- well, two things. First off, neither of these ladies were young girls at this point. They'd been around the sexual block. A lot of femmeslash dealing with girl on girl seems to be girls who are Sakura's age or younger, and the sweeter, cutesier stuff is admittedly more suited to that age range.

But also, as a ... uh, gay-ish, probably bisexual-ish woman, I sometimes get frustrated with the fact that, as you said yourself, soooo much girl/girl is so ridiculously cutesy and pretty and romantic and pink and flowers, and... there's nothing wrong with that, of course, but there's no reason two girls can't have raunchy hog wild rutting sex and enjoy it and find it a fun/meaningful/sexy experience. I think sometimes society and girls themselves get a little, I dunno, freaked out by female bodies and female sexuality, and sometimes I just want to celebrate WOMEN'S SEX and WOMEN'S BODIES. The m/m world, and even some of the m/f world is totally down with the dick worship. Come on, fandom. Don't fear what a lady can bring.

Ahem, sorry for that little rant, but yeah, that's one of my pet issues. Thanks again for the review!