Title: Traces
Part: 8 of 10
Characters: David Beckham, Martín Cáceres, Fabio Cannavaro, Iker Casillas, Royston Drenthe, Julien Faubert, Fernando Gago, Raúl González, Pep Guardiola, Thierry Henry, Guti Hernández, Xavi Hernández, Gonzalo Higuaín, Andrés Iniesta, Bojan Krkić, Lionel Messi, Ruud van Nistelrooy, Gerard Piqué, Carles Puyol, Sergio Ramos
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The entropy of the last chapter is paying off here now. The orchestration feels like it's gone, plans and control seem to be dissolving as people prove more unpredictable than ever and people are doing things ( ... )
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I'm also really glad that you liked the (non-)resolution of the Raúl-Guti drama because I think it would have been easy for me to shirk it and leave things hanging in the air, but as you said, it was time for some progress to be made, especially considering what's unfolding in the rest of the story.
Thank you for leaving a comment to this part as well as the second. As always, your intellectual literary critiques are a delight.
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An the setup was so great, but the action happening fast and furiously here is working well. It must seem daunting, but it's great!
And ahaha, not really either intellectual or literary (although I'm sure I could write an entire entry on this epic once done, perhaps I will), I'm just a reader greatly enjoying a story! Can't wait to see what happens next - even with action, still suspense!
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I think you're right. My feelings mirrored Raúl's to a certain extent, in that I started off going 'Fuck, I have to resolve this' and then going 'You know what? Let's live in denial' and then going 'Aw, shit, I really should resolve this, shouldn't I?' ;)
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Hee, I loved reading this comment. Thanks so much for taking the time to write it. I know it's trying to sit down and list the individual things that you enjoyed about a fic, but I'm so grateful that you did. As always, you're so giving with your feedback. I love seeing what parts of the fic resonate with you, which parts you find entertaining, because they're never what I expect! I guess I put in little touches to keep myself interested and - for those who want to read this story a second time - make it a little more multi-layered, and it's great to see which of those details stand out to you (like the word "bangin'"!).
I want Raúl and Guti to resolve their issues and have hot sex as well! I think I'll need to write some Raúl/Guti fic after I'm done with Traces, because there are so many images in my head of those two that just need to be written down, lol.
When Beckham left the Union, he left a free spot which was filled by Bojan. Guti was unaware that Bojan had joined the Union (until this chapter, after the ( ... )
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The way you describe the characters and situations is awesome, it is so well written. I really enjoy reading this story!
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