traces, part eight (a).

[casi_casi]

Title: Traces
Part: 8 of 10
Characters: David Beckham, Martín Cáceres, Fabio Cannavaro, Iker Casillas, Royston Drenthe, Julien Faubert, Fernando Gago, Raúl González, Pep Guardiola, Thierry Henry, Guti Hernández, Xavi Hernández, Gonzalo Higuaín, Andrés Iniesta, Bojan Krkić, Lionel Messi, Ruud van Nistelrooy, Gerard Piqué, Carles Puyol, Sergio Ramos

Comments

Comment part a

[tonstant_weader]

Yes. Yes. Yes.

The entropy of the last chapter is paying off here now. The orchestration feels like it's gone, plans and control seem to be dissolving as people prove more unpredictable than ever and people are doing things

Re: Comment part a

[casi_casi]

Ah, your comment made me smile so widely and idiotically. It was so exciting and quite daunting to write about stuff actually happening, about people 'doing things', so it's a tremendous relief and pleasure to see that you're happy to see the back of the orchestration. :)

I'm also really glad that you liked the (non-)resolution of the Raúl-Guti drama because I think it would have been easy for me to shirk it and leave things hanging in the air, but as you said, it was time for some progress to be made, especially considering what's unfolding in the rest of the story.

Thank you for leaving a comment to this part as well as the second. As always, your intellectual literary critiques are a delight.

Re: Comment part a

[tonstant_weader]

You absolutely could not have left Raúl and Guti where it left off either one or more chapters ago. I think it absolutely had to happen although it probably wasn't easy for you. In the sense that it wasn't exactly easy for them either, the hesitance may have helped the feel of the argument overall. And if they hadn't worked something out we wouldn't have had the brilliant interactions for the rest of the chapter(s). Obviously as the detective is usually proxy for the reader, if not the "assistant" or "chronicler" I felt a little abandoned when there was Raúl/Guti issues. (OK, maybe not really, but I'm much happier at this point.)

An the setup was so great, but the action happening fast and furiously here is working well. It must seem daunting, but it's great!

And ahaha, not really either intellectual or literary (although I'm sure I could write an entire entry on this epic once done, perhaps I will), I'm just a reader greatly enjoying a story! Can't wait to see what happens next - even with action, still suspense!

Re: Comment part a

[casi_casi]

I think it absolutely had to happen although it probably wasn't easy for you. In the sense that it wasn't exactly easy for them either, the hesitance may have helped the feel of the argument overall.
I think you're right. My feelings mirrored Raúl's to a certain extent, in that I started off going 'Fuck, I have to resolve this' and then going 'You know what? Let's live in denial' and then going 'Aw, shit, I really should resolve this, shouldn't I?' ;)

Re: Comment part a

[tonstant_weader]

It was perfect. I could feel that thought process going on. It was very organic.

As a reader I would have been pouty too if you had pushed it off until like the last chapter.

Re: Comment part a

[casi_casi]

I'm sorry, this is such a late reply but:

(a) I'm so glad. :)
(b) That's a thoroughly excellent gif.