Comments | bluewalk: [fic] tricks out of our sleeves (pt. 2)

bluewalk

[fic] tricks out of our sleeves (pt. 2)

Aug 18, 2012 04:26

Title: tricks out of our sleeves
Rating: PG
Characters/Pairing: (reaching for) Zoro/Sanji
Word Count: ~7200

Set after Water 7, right before entering the Florian Triangle.

For c_callosum

( For all his years at sea, he knows he’s still got the devil’s luck in his blood, devil’s fire in his bones. )

Comments 16

dark_kaomi August 18 2012, 17:10:43 UTC

Ah this was awesome. I feel like doing the Chopper dance. Zoro's voice was beautiful in this and like always your descriptions were amazing. I got chills at times. I think the most emotional parts were Zoro describing his experience watching little!Sanji. And I loved how you reused those little details of Sanji counting his heartbeat and being afraid of being buried. So wonderful.

This was a lovely story and it worked so well. Thank you.

bluewalk August 19 2012, 01:22:25 UTC

No, thank YOU. Your opinion means a lot to me so I'm always super glad to hear when you've enjoyed a fic. Thank you thank you thank you! And yes, recycling head!canon is a go go. 8Db

whitecourtain August 18 2012, 18:40:24 UTC

Yes! Yes! I was waiting for this :D I love you so much! Uuun Sanji angst and wow there was actually a lot of things that I haven't thought about before and they are so true about Sanji and Zoro! And it was so well-written! Definietly one of my favourite OP stories. Just one question...I didn't really got this but who was the story-teller? Usopp? D: or just...

bluewalk August 19 2012, 01:24:01 UTC

Sorry the wait was so long! Thank you for sticking with me and thank you for reading! I'm incredibly flattered and just-- yes. So happy. <3

who was the story-teller?
It was the Sunny's Klabautermann! :)

whitecourtain August 19 2012, 23:23:42 UTC

Rereads.
Or maybe they don’t come across many Klabautermann
Facepalms.
All right so my mind centers a little on the guys and it may sometimes junk this-n-that when reading...BUT I GET IT NOW!! :D hahaha *completeididot*
But srsly thanks, I'm hungarian and we don't have a word like that(seeing that english uses the original german name) we simply call them kobold so I had no idea what it is and I don't think I payed much attention to it when actually reading the fic D: but well...you learn something new every day xD

bluewalk August 20 2012, 02:30:17 UTC

Ah, don't worry about it! Zoro and Sanji are the stars after all! :D

I actually didn't know what a Klabautermann was either before I read OP. I mean, I was familiar with kobold from other mythologies, but Klabautermann seems to be a specific form of kobold?

If I can ask, do you read Hungarian scans of the manga? Do they use kobold instead of Klabautermann to refer to the spirit of Merry and Sunny?

Thread 6

aevium August 18 2012, 18:49:04 UTC

Oh my good sweet lord. This was incredible. I swear your writing is so beautifully done, everything is weaved together so intelligently and it really, really shows.

I love how this two-shot was not at all about Zoro and Sanji discovering each other's weaknesses but instead stumbling upon the source of their strengths. And honestly I don't think there was a better way to show this than how you compared the parts of Sanji's brittle, malnourished body to weapons, and a source of blazing fire and parchment to tattoo faith onto himself. It's brilliant, I can't even tell you how brilliant that is. It just screams so loud, it felt like Sanji screaming his strengths out to the world, that his experience on that rock forged the devil in his blood and bones, as you so awesomely put it ( ... )

bluewalk August 19 2012, 02:22:28 UTC

Nnnnnngk. So blown away right now. Thank you for your wonderful comment! Not sure if I am capable of an intelligent response, but I will try.

I love how this two-shot was not at all about Zoro and Sanji discovering each other's weaknesses but instead stumbling upon the source of their strengths.Yes! This is partly because when I asked Zoro what his weakness was, he just slowly raised an eyebrow at me, and when I asked Sanji, his predictable response was BEAUTIFUL WOMEN. Haha. No, but seriously, we go in knowing their soft spots if not their weaknesses (Kuina for Zoro, fear of starvation for Sanji), and we also know how much they've grown despite--or because of--those soft spots, so that's what I wanted to explore. Zoro grows because of his promise, and Sanji grows because of his gratitude. Yush ( ... )

uftaki August 18 2012, 22:38:43 UTC

And here we get Zoro witnessing Sanji's defining moment in childhood. The imagery when they first arrived, during the storm was very interesting, and mythical, surreal... Very dream-like. Then you get the reality of it all, with little Sanji crying, and grown Sanji trying so hard to hold back time... hold back Zeff's sacrifice... and Zoro standing between them, to save Sanji that sight and help him focus, to help him see... like Sanji helped him earlier. Very powerful, and very well-done. (and Zoro's hands gentle on his neck was just a ... *purr!* Very nice detail, there. :3)

.... oh dear god. The image of Sanji sinking into the rock was horrific. D: Thank goodness Zoro was there to - figuratively and literally - pull him out of it.

And the image of Zoro, watching little Sanji struggle... seeing him scream himself hoarse after the ship, and beat his hands against the ground... that being the thing that broke him... to go after the ship and futilely yank on the anchor chain to pull it back... Very powerful stuff, that. Zoro ( ... )

bluewalk August 19 2012, 02:35:45 UTC

I always get overly ambitious and try to cram in tons of details and half-scenes when writing fic, so I'm always ecstatic to hear which ones specifically jumped out and stayed with a reader. Thank you so much for letting me know!! Seriously, my heart swells to hear it <3

I can't really imagine how their first kiss would go down. Maybe something like:
"COME ON. WE'RE MAN ENOUGH TO DO THIS."
"RIGHT. WHO'S AFRAID OF KISSING. NOT ME."
"I BET I'M MORE NOT-AFRAID THAN YOU."
"PROVE IT."
And then they accidentally knock each other's teeth out.

Yosh, it was the Sunny! The Sunny is privy to all their secrets.... it's always watching. Nowhere on board is safe. >_>

This part was hard for me to really pull together, but it was definitely worth it for lovely comments such as yours. Thank you!!

c_callosum August 19 2012, 04:15:32 UTC

Eeeeeeeeeeeeee! This was absolutely lovely. The words and thoughts and emotions are tumbling over in my head and I'm not sure if I can say everything I want to say in this comment. But thank you. I'm touched, grateful, and you DEFINITELY filled the bill with the manly h/c prompt. And don't worry about the Zoro/Sanji because this was just PERFECT ( ... )

bluewalk August 20 2012, 02:24:24 UTC

Thank youuuuuuu! I do have to apologize again for this being so inexcusably late, but I am so relieved to hear you enjoyed it nonetheless!! ALL MY LOVE WENT INTO IT. FOR THEE.

I realize that my take on the Zoro/Sanji pairing is almost indistinguishable from gen, so I'm sorry for that too! But as I said to aevium above, it's because I think they're actually really romantic just the way they are, and I can't see them acting any other way towards each other-- romance a la Zoro and Sanji, totally vitriolic and not to be emulated XD But I'm glad it worked ok for you here!

About incorporating the entity encountered by Lola's crew-- it's really just because I agonize over that sort of thing/take fic too seriously. I feel like I have to put on some serious camo-gear and go scouting for little nooks and crannies in the OP world in which I can plausibly set the fic. But that's fun too, because the OP world is so rich! :D

LIFE WILL BE FINE. Ahhh, I still owe you a message! Sorry about that! I'll shoot you one as soon as I can. I hope you've ( ... )