Hey there,
Here's Chapter 11 of "I Prefer the Mind Control." I'm trying to make actual chapters now. Enjoy the probably-NSFW ridiculousness!
Day 1,
Day 2,
Day 3,
Day 4,
Day 5(ish),
Chapter 6,
Chapter 7,
Chapter 8,
Chapter 9,
Chapter 10 ---------
“So, anything I gotta do beforehand?” I asked. Hey, I didn't know, well, anything about this.
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'Nothing specifically,' Xan said, about to make his next call. )
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As always, I love the crap out of Dylan's voice and his attitude. Yeah, Xan can be a little cardboardy but I kinda like that right now. I have a feeling his real personality is going to start showing, soon enough. :)
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Dammit, how come Devin never tells his heart to stop racing and calls it an asshole? Why didn't I think of that? He's only on the verge of a fucking panic attack every 20 seconds or so. Oh well. He's probably too busy calling himself an asshole, anyway. I really liked that line, though.
Lololol the bouncing. I forgot about that. Also lololol at the "quirk of evolution". This is so unfair - my stupid plot points just look stupid, while yours look ingenious. Maybe I should be writing metafictionwhateverit'scalled instead of goofy dystopia.
This was a fun chapter. :D
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“From what I've heard, trying to deprogram people can have seriously bad results and lead to scary shit,” I said.
HAHAHAHA. STILL FUCKING AMAZING. Thank you for the shout-out. :D
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Lol, lampshades make everything more awesome! I hear there's a Black Friday sale on lampshades at the Story Depot, haha.
I'm glad you enjoyed my chapter so much!
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