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I Call The Shots - As Close to pwp as i get

Dec 30, 2010 00:52

Title: I Call The Shots
Pairing: Onew/Taemin
Length: 4215
Genre: Romantic Smut/M/s
Rating: NC17
Summary: Taemin is angry but really he's horny/ Jinki has a sudden fit of DominatingKinkiJinki (Established Couple)
A/N Because I didn't want to sound like an even bigger pervette than I actually am, I have aged Taemin up in this fic so that he's a ( Read more... )

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Comments 68

kaybee38 December 30 2010, 06:12:23 UTC

SPOT! (I will read in the AM!)

addicterated December 30 2010, 06:57:39 UTC

kk :)

Taemin licked the effin' whip.... kaybee38 December 30 2010, 14:44:40 UTC

I can't even...

*looks at a can of Pepsi's ingredients for a moment*

How did you? I mean...it's...I just...(sigh)

Ok ok. This is beautiful! It's all love and caring wrapped in an S&M package (pun intended) Your writing style is so descriptive and clear, my heart stopped right along with Taemin's. I LOVE strong Kinki!Jinki. I love how he's a little drunk off of his newfound power and how this is almost the beginning of a master/slave relationship. Like they've crossed some invisible threshold. Here's my favorite stuff:

"Lock it, please," Jinki reminds Taemin, not yet turning around. He's counting in his head in every language he knows in an attempt to make sure he's fully in control of himself though Jinki is well aware that the minute he turns around and sees Taemin's big eyes and soft lips all bets are off. The beat in his brain is heavy and hungry and he swallows before he turns around.

and this...
Which is why his lips part pliantly and his teeth gently nip the coil of leather. Taemin hears Jinki's little intake of breath ( ... )

kaybee38 December 30 2010, 15:01:01 UTC

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evilvalenstrife December 30 2010, 06:36:46 UTC

Oh my Shisus.... *runs to her bag pulls out cigarettes and whiskey*
Ah... That's the good stuff...
*snuffs cig and puts bottle back under her bed*
That was EPIC... I don't know how to describe exactly what I'm going through...
You continue to slay me!!!!

addicterated December 30 2010, 06:57:53 UTC

I'm glad...I think. *giggle*

evilvalenstrife December 31 2010, 04:38:12 UTC

Good slay! Good slay!!!!
I am in love with this fic!!! You, my dear, have magic fingers!

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addicterated December 30 2010, 06:58:23 UTC

I couldn't write him like this if i didn't, i'd feel too guilty. LOL - glad you liked :)

cablackwood December 30 2010, 09:53:31 UTC

Ok, I'm gonna 'SPOT' cause.............I just want to ^_^

addicterated December 30 2010, 10:19:50 UTC

bb, you know you're always welcome to any spots you want.

ext_312349 December 30 2010, 09:58:16 UTC

Woah~~~~!!!!!!! *flails about*
This is one hell of a fic~~~!!!!!
*splash water on face*

Kinky Jinki never fails to surprise me~!=3
Your writing never fails to make my day~! <3

addicterated December 30 2010, 10:19:31 UTC

I'm glad you liked it, was kinda nervous *wibble*

ext_312349 December 30 2010, 15:02:09 UTC

Awwww....don't be nervous~~~~

Would it be weird if I told you that after reading your later post with the vid of Kyu baby being pissed, and re-reading this fic, the couple that materialized in my head was KyuChul?? *shuffles about*

On another note, not sure if you've seen this, but it's a vid from SuJu's "Foresight"
They sang an impromptu + different version of "Sorry Sorry"
Kyu's voice was perfect~!=3

Hope you like it~~~=D

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qK2bf2pn_eA