round 04, challenge three: results
round 04, challenge three: eliminations
#13 (-08) Eary Rise, Morning Song. by conditionally
#05 (-04) run away by paintingseas
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round 04, challenge three: people's choice
#06 (+04) I wanna be the very best by subtleslide
round 04, challenge three: people's choice
#12 flight patterns by screenbias
Subtle yet hard hitting, the fic was able to relay a complete story in 100 words. Good job on this one :)
round 04, challenge three: tallies
Round Four, Challenge Three
01. what if (a much of a which of a wind) by namjatop
02. foot in mouth by rightful_wrong
03. the man who sold the world by cokecane
04. Words by staircasing
05. run away by paintingseas
06. I wanna be the very best by subtleslide
07. if icarus had lived to see by dystopialights
08. regimented order doesn't restore by azurehook
09. take a chance by gamekyu
10. bitter medicine by mariandevotion
11. epicenters by sansmerci
12. flight patterns by screenbias
13. Eary Rise, Morning Song. by conditionally
round 04, challenge three: elimination comments
#01 - didn't quite like how the prompt was used in this drabble; focused on the future instead of past mistakes and repercussions. felt like it should delve more into that tragic hero. the "new pair of gucci loafers" jumps out and doesn't seem to fit with the other details that are more focused on emotional details rather than physical details. also, would GD be the type to be fan of Gucci, a brand known for more conservative styles with dark colors and orderly style? Alexander McQueen, Christian Dior seem more his fit.
#02 - The characterizations are unmemorable. Also, what's the story? You could have done a lot more with the number of words allowed.
#02 - i feel like this needs to be longer to pull off everything the writer throws at the reader.
#03 - i like the descriptions in this, but the last paragraph was jarring. i don't understand how jaejoong caused yoochun to make a mistake, and i don't understand the purpose of the last line of dialogue - it seems like a non sequitur more than anything.
#03 - The opening was a bit shaky, it progressed to something good, until the last line just gives a bad impression on the drabble. It's out of place and awkward.
#04 - It's an interesting idea, but the "telling" style of writing does little justice when you tell the characters' feelings and thoughts. This would be better if it were more subtle.
#04 - a lot of telling and very little showing. failed to convince or elicit empathy.
#05 - i found this story and some of the phrases terribly cliched (for example "lies fell from his lips like a poison"). this story could have been better if it was shorter, but instead it exceeded the word limit.
#05 - This read awkwardly.
#05 - The word love is repeated too often (almost in every sentence in the first two paragraphs) and seems more like a cop out from describing Tablo's reasoning behind cheating on his wife. Also, more on why Tablo is able to forgive himself would better explain his motivation for cheating and be a better use of the word limit rather than what kind of love he's feeling (or rather, what kind of love he's NOT feeling). I would've liked to see Eunhyuk play a more active role in this as well - what about his own morals? He rejected Tablo the first time for 'Tablo's sake' but is he okay being the other man? The whole drabble just seemed to lack something.
#05 - the point-of-view in the first paragraph wasn't well defined, and combined with so many explicitly "poignant" statements the whole peice felt cluttered.
#08 - interesting form but the execution fell just a tad bit short. i was never able to figure out exactly was going on (and the summary didn't much help with that).
#08 - It didn't really fit the prompt, and it was hard to tell what was going on.
#09 - the writing in this is actually really nice and flows well - there's just a disconnect between the first two paragraphs and the last one, and i don't understand how "opening the door" equates with kibum's waiting for death.
#09 - didn't really get this one. some of the lines sounded awkward and some of the images seemed forced.
#12 - feels contrived. all of it is very very surface; the subject of suicide requires a little more depth.
#13 - honestly, it didn't seem like much was happening in this one. i don't see the connection to the prompt.
#13 - i couldn't see how the theme was used and i was quite confused by what was going on. maybe it could have worked out better if the formatting was successful.
#13 - I like what the story was trying to show, but I feel like you maybe could have fleshed it out better.
#13 - didn't see how the prompt was used in this drabble at all. yes, her mom died, but was that the point? she didn't say bye to her mom that morning she died and that was the mistake? where is the tragedy? don't understand and the conversation didn't enlighten.
#13 - this seems to lack depth and enough description as to what is happening.
#13 - I didn't think it fit the prompt at all.
#13 - First of all, the codes are all messed up and some spelling mistakes and . Next, the story itself gives out a dull impression. In fact, it's not even impressive. A bit too general and too simple to the extend that there's no story. Sorry to say, but this is like a WIP for something more, and it sounds unfinished or a mere intro. If it's written for the purpose of telling how Tiffany is reluctant to wake up, sorry to say, but this is plain boring. If there's no strong plot, or the story is just something random like this, it could be saved by very great description and metaphors, but even that wasn't present, so I just have to say no.
#13 - Can't see how the theme plays out at all.
round 04, challenge three: favorite comments
#04 - A very nice ending; A great description of someone who tries to change for someone to notice. The ending just makes me want to read it all again and think how sweet this is :)
#06
#06 - It's quirky and cutesy, but it has an emotional impact. This kind of writing is uncommon and I really enjoyed it. It's memorable.
#06 - I really loved it and it made me smile. Very unique take on the prompt. It has some terms that seem obscure if one doesn't know the game very well (re: me) but I think it just emphasizes Kyuhyun's gamer mind in a wonderful way.
#06 - funny and poignant at the same time - the combination makes for something wonderfully realistic.
#07 - There were a lot of great drabbles for this challenge, but this stood out the most for me. Lovely piece.
#10 - this fic really captured the prompt well, and had an amazing execution and story idea. even more impressive was being canon and yet, taking a new twist on a rather familiar idea.
#10 - a really strong story that supported the touching last line. succinct and quite well-done.
#11 - good descriptive writing and educational to boot! i quite enjoyed this piece.
#11 - this is written so beautifully and creatively. the images are vivid and the language colorful. i love it. it's a fantastic take on zhoumi's scandal.
#11 - The imagery was fantastic.
#12 - the imagery was well done and well defined, they all lead to an end successfully.
fineholdmycandy and rightful_wrong have dropped out. w0rdskillhave been disqualified for using an "extra" skip.