The Gang: Chapter 6 - All Revealed

[zelda_queen]

ZeldaQueen: WARNING! THIS CHAPTER CONTAINS AN UNDERAGE GIRL PULLING OFF HER BROTHER'S UNDERPANTS AND EXPOSING HIS JUNK TO THE WORLD, WHILE LAUGHING AT HIS MISFORTUNE! IT ALSO CONTAINS A DIFFERENT UNDERAGE GIRL GIVING SAID BROTHER A BLOWJOB! DON'T READ THIS IF SHARP IMPLEMENTS ARE AROUND!

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[chibi_regalli]

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!

Yeeeees, Neil needs to meet with the Higurashi cast. Preferably when ALL of them have gone Hinamizawa Syndrome-y, but since it's probably too difficult to get five of them to have violent breakdowns at once, I'd settle for him falling victim to a Shion loop.

And the entire cast of Brave. Definitely. Including Mordu. That would be nice.

[chibi_regalli]

Have EVERYONE kill them all.

[nix501st]

Oh my god, this is just..

What even
I cannot even
I cannot begin to even

*smacks self* Okay, better...

Am I the only one who really wants these people to be trolled by BEN right now? I mean, there are so many things that this 'gang' "shouldn't have done..."

And Neil wanted to publish this, right?

[zelda_queen]

"And Neil wanted to publish this, right?"

Actually and very thankfully, I don't think he did. He just had fans who told him that he *should* submit stuff for publication (this being about his quality of writing for Hogwarts Exposed). Which is no less disturbing, granted.

[szaleniec1000]

And this is despite the fact that, even leaving aside the content, the quality of the writing in Hogwarts Exposed is horrible by any reasonable standard. Which suggests that they were more interested in the content and willing to overlook the writing, or they honestly couldn't see what was wrong with it. HG131 vacillated between these two positions.

[mibamonster]

"“So come on cheer up” said Victoria “You might as well enjoy yourself. The horrible stuff’s over, it’s all fun from here on in. Think of all the lovely girls you’re going to see stripped off and naked” hoping to get something out of him."
... Say what?
'We're going to blackmail you with this if you don't do what we want, so cheer up! It's time to become a professinoal molester now!'
...
...
My GOD. Even for Neil, this is a new low.

'“Just let him undress you and have a bit of fun” said Victoria.'
...
Just...
I...
no.
No comment.
I...

[guardians_song]

...I hate to say it, but this chapter got slightly better on the second reading.

I got so bored the first time through that I thought AMY gave Benedict the blowjob.

Yeah, this version is slightly less excruciating.

*throws bleeprin and nuclear weaponry for the final chapter*

[zelda_queen]

"I got so bored the first time through that I thought AMY gave Benedict the blowjob."

Well, Neil did list incest as one of his warnings for this fic. I don't know if he counts the stripping or not, but I have a terrible feeling that if this had gone on, your first thought wouldn't have been that far off the mark...

[chibi_regalli]

... WHYYYYYYYYYYYY.

[katistrophe]

Ergh. The chapter title's bad enough - "All Revealed" sounds like "Hogwarts Exposed", or maybe "Benedict's Junk Revealed". (Benedict is about the least appropriate name for that guy. How 'bout Maledict?)

Victoria: Nothing will happen if you snitch on us, "we take precautions."
Do they have a brain-washed squad of killer kids, or can Victoria control drones from her laptop?

“I’m an expert. What can I say?” said Victoria with a grin.
TMI, girl. T-M-Fucking-I.

“Yes” said Victoria, she leaned close to Alison and whispered in her ear “Blow job” Alison opened her mouth wide in surprise and immediately looked over at Emily who nodded to her.A- buh- whuh- AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARGH! HE'S TWELVE! SHE'S... ALSO TWELVE! I GUESS! I CAN'T TURN OFF THE ALLCAPS! I'M GONNA KILL NEIL! I'LL STICK A RED-HOT POKER UP HIS REAR! I'LL POUR MOLTEN LEAD UP HIS NOSE! I'LL FLAY HIS MICROSCOPIC DICK! AND THEN I'LL PUT NETTLES ON IT! AND WASH THEM OFF WITH BOILING WATER! I'LL POUR ACID OVER HIM! I'LL... DO A LOT MORE HORRIBLE THINGS, AND