dameruth: The Hearts Beneath (Ten/Jack) [PG] - SUMMER HOLIDAYS, PROMPT 8

[trobadora]

Title: The Hearts Beneath
Author: DameRuth (dameruth)
Challenge: Summer Holidays 2
Prompt Group: 8 - muffle - scuttle - forest - gloom
Rating: PG for mild language.
Pairing: Ten/Jack
Series: "Flowers"
Word count: In the ballpark of 5,500.
Spoilers/Warnings: None, but part of an AU series (should stand alone).
Summary: Ten and Jack wake something sleeping

Comments

[yamx]

The descriptions here are breathtaking. Starting with the forest, so lush and vibrant - until Jack realizes that it's in fact creepy and dead. hen the painful memories - theirs and the others' - and finally the perfect resolution. And the conversation afterwards is so them. Saying everything without really saying anything. :)

[von_gelmini]

This was lovely. That was a great plot. The winnower, what a horrifying weapon. But it was nice how they healed the other and the other helped heal them. And Princess Bride FTW!

[dshael]

I love the creepiness of this, and the way you fix things. Classic ghost story! :)

[kensieg]

Very nice. I'm glad that you brought up Jack's family.

[edenfalling]

One typo: Diving in and trying actively to swim to the surface of the flood might not work any better than going limp, but at lest he'd have tried to keep the initiative. Should be "least."

Other than that, WOW. That is intense, and you are seriously awesome at atmospheric writing -- I could feel the unnatural quiet of the forest, the dim, damp coolness. And then the tension of the emotions and plot echoed the growing storm perfectly, and the little flashback/infodump about the Time War was chilling and exactly right. I like how they don't just get over it, either; they're still shaken up at the end, but you give the understanding that they will work through this, because they know each other and care about each other, and are damned well going to put in the work to keep their relationship going.