dameruth: The Hearts Beneath (Ten/Jack) [PG] - SUMMER HOLIDAYS, PROMPT 8

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Title: The Hearts Beneath
Author: DameRuth (dameruth)
Challenge: Summer Holidays 2
Prompt Group: 8 - muffle - scuttle - forest - gloom
Rating: PG for mild language.
Pairing: Ten/Jack
Series: "Flowers"
Word count: In the ballpark of 5,500.
Spoilers/Warnings: None, but part of an AU series (should stand alone).
Summary: Ten and Jack wake something sleeping

Comments

[phantomcranefly]

Wow. I love this- the tension in the beginning, the descriptions, the way you narrate the psychic arguments- and you get their voices so perfect. I suppose the Winnower's creation isn't even anything as simple as a stable time loop, which was my first thought- information with no beginning. What a fun way to end it, too- is that tying back in with them misquoting Shakespeare back in Hothouse Flowers?

[tardis_stowaway]

This is a wonderfully visual fic, full of striking descriptions. Excellent job building up the creepy atmosphere. I love the resolution Jack and the Doctor found for the haunting, laying the ghosts to rest while also re-dealing with some of their own issues.

The Princess Bride quotes at the end add a bit of extra credit win.

[sahiya]

This was fantastic. I can't believe you packed that much plot, emotional resonance, and resolution into less than 6k. Beautifully done. And I love the Princess Bride references at the end, heh.

[dark_aegis]

That was gorgeous. I love hints of the Time War, especially when it comes to involving forgotten weapons and the aftermath.

This line, though, reminded me vividly of the Princess Bride:

“There are very few perfect backsides in the Universe and I'd hate to ruin one of them.”

Lovely. Thank you for sharing!

[lindenharp]

This is heartsbreaking and more lovely than I have words to describe. The atmosphere and the themes (the place haunted by part sorrow and anger, and the redemptive nature of regret and forgiveness) remind me strongly of Diane Duane, who is on the top of my list of "pro writers I'd kill to be able to write like".

[pitry]

Yay! More Flowers stories. That was very touching - loved the bit about "we cared, in the end". Very true. ;)