Comments | waltzmatildah: [breaking bad] fic

waltzmatildah

[breaking bad] fic | A Matter of Time

May 28, 2013 11:06

television: breaking bad, character: bb: jesse, fic: prompt me, fic: one shot, character: bb: skyler

Comments 22

bellonablack May 28 2013, 02:00:11 UTC

YOUUU. YOU. *points* You person here ( ... )

waltzmatildah May 28 2013, 07:31:41 UTC

OMG THANK YOU SO MUCH!! I got catteo to read this through for me first because I was a bit worried that it was too much, you know? Also, for some reason I had you mixed up with another prompter and didn't realise it was you (I thought the prompter was someone I didn't know) so I was worried I'd freak them out! Then I re-checked the post and realised it was you and felt much more comfortable about the whole thing!

I like that she can look at the body and Jesse can't. I feel like Skyler would ~need to look. That she'd need to know, whereas Jesse's MO is (for the most part) avoidance. SO YAY! I am super glad that distinction worked!!

I like, even, how she was a Walt substitute and she kind of fit the role in a mixed way. YES! THIS! Because there ~are so many similarities between Walt and Skyler and Jesse may come up with good ideas every now and then (magnets!), but he still needs help to carry them out. He still needs Walt. Or Mike. Or the illusion of Gus. Jesse has minus amounts of self-confidence and him transferring his reliance to ( ... )

bellonablack May 28 2013, 18:56:19 UTC

The thing is:) I requested this from you because I knew you would do this right!<3 I mean the characters are intimidating and you would have to respect them a lot to get these two right --Which Happened!! :)

Skyler would need to know (a driving force for her) and Double Yes to avoidance being played out to the point you used it.

And that you used the Walt-Skyler similarities!!! <3 and didn't pull punches with who Jesse is.

I was excited to see you offer on the meme because I've wanted a good Skyler-Jesse fic dynamic and I knew you would be the person to ask :)z

catteo May 28 2013, 04:59:16 UTC

YOU SEE I TOLD YOU SHE WOULD LOVE IT!

OH MY GOD I STILL LOVE IT SO HARD TOOOOOOOO!!!!!

Everything about it is fabulous. The way that you've written Skyler as almost not having a choice in the matter and so being resigned and yet at the same time you can sense the regret and the horror that she feels at what she's done. And Jesse is pure Jesse in his total inability to process anything.

I am probably not making sense any more.

But basically. YES. THIS. MORE PLEASE.

waltzmatildah May 28 2013, 07:32:50 UTC

YOU SEE I TOLD YOU SHE WOULD LOVE IT! YOU DID! YOU REALLY DID!

Thank you for reading through it first! And for reacting the way you did last night (and just now for that matter!).

catteo May 28 2013, 10:24:11 UTC

Yeah, well, it was a real chore all 4 times that I read it so you SHOULD thank me. Honestly. I deserve some sort of sainthood. WHATEVER YOU AWESOME THING. You're totally welcome and you know that I will read your stuff and fangirl you ANY OLD TIME!

revengent May 28 2013, 19:00:24 UTC

WOW this is like, really really awesome. I will be 100% pleased if something like this happens on the show. I LOVE your Skyler, she's perfect.

But she takes the shot anyway. Slides the pads of both index fingers into place and squeezes on instinct; shuts her eyes against the inevitability of death.

That it is not her own, for today anyway, is all that matters.

SO GREAT.

And I also love how Jesse is asking her what to do and calling her Mrs. White it's just like he transferred Whites that he relies on

waltzmatildah May 30 2013, 02:06:55 UTC

THANK YOU!!!!!!

And I'm glad you liked my Skyler! This is the first time I've ever written her and I think she's an incredible character so it was suuuuuuper scary!

THANK YOU FOR READING/COMMENTING ♥

I am so ready for this show to be back but not ready for it to be overrrrrr. SO TORN!!!

falafel_musings May 29 2013, 08:15:08 UTC

Yay! You're writing BrBa fic again! And now I will have to start nagging you about writing that 'Jesse finds out' fic for me. :D

But in the meantime, this fic was excellent and so so haunting! I do love your very sparing subtle style of writing. It forces me to read every word because you don't paint a big picture for your reader, you just give us tiny glimpses and let us fill in the blanks ourselves.

Your characterisation of Skyler and Jesse is spot on for this scenario. Skyler calm and controlled even in a state of shock contrasts nicely with Jesse's twitchiness and verging hysteria. The constant use of 'Mrs White' was very telling too.

waltzmatildah May 30 2013, 02:12:21 UTC

OMG, I know. The whole time I was writing this I was all, "eeeek, I REEEEALLY need to finish falafel_musing's Jesse+Walt fic. REALLY NEED TOOOOOOOO!

So firstly; I am sorry, but I also haven't forgotten so it's not complete fail. Just partial fail!! Haha!

Secondly; THANK YOU SO MUCH! I always find it freaking awesome to get positive reviews from people who write fic that I admire. Thank you, thank you!

I'm also glad you like my style in general. It can be kind of exhausting to write, and is definitely better suited to short fics, but I do love it so. I'm just super pleased that it works for other people too. Especially for this show, where everything on screen is so carefully chosen. I want to try and do that in fic too.

Anyway, rambling now! THANK YOU!

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waltzmatildah May 30 2013, 02:18:38 UTC

HNNNGGHHHH!!!!! *MAD FLAILING*

Comments that start like this are ALWAYS MY FAVOURITE!

YOU WROTE SKYLER AND JESSE FIC

I DID!!! And it was terrifying but in an awesome way!! This show is so freaking intimidating with its perfect characterisation and its perfect narrative and its perfect cinematography. Mostly when I contemplate writing something I usually end up backing away slowly!

BUT NOT THIS TIME! WHEEEEEE!

And I love the sparse, spare nature of the prose, too: I love comments that single this out specifically because I know this style really isn't for everyone (though I love reading and writing it THE MOSTEST!) and it's always awesome to find that it really does work for other people too.

And you're totally right about it being a style that works well for this show.

THIS SHOOWWWWWW!!!

Is it August yet? No?

Right.

Finally though, THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR READING AND COMMETINGT!! I means ~heaps that you liked this (given your Skyler appreciation in particular but for Other Reasons too!).