Comments | vm_summer: Chapter 13: Cho-sen Pizza

ladydisdain225 in vm_summer

Chapter 13: Cho-sen Pizza

Sep 16, 2006 21:43

Title: All Fall Down
Pairing / Character: Veronica/Logan, Keith
Rating: PG-13 to R
Words: 96,545
Summary: In Neptune, the brighter the summer sun, the deeper the shadows.
Spoilers / Warnings: Seasons 1 and 2 / Language and adult situations
Chapter 13: Cho-sen Pizza
Authors: ladyanne04 and ladydisdain225
Additional Characters: Mr. Cho, Corny, Dick
Rating: PG
Words: 6600
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keith, mr. cho, back-up, dick, corny, veronica, all fall down, ladyanne04, logan, ladydisdain225

Comments 22

saramitra September 17 2006, 03:44:17 UTC

yey first comment!
wow. I totally believed that first dream sequence. *slaps forehead* I knew it was way too fast et cetera but i guess i just want L/V together soo badly in this fic that i let myself believe it. haha :P
and yesss logans going to go and hes going to save her and its all going to be GOOD. *sigh* pleeease let it all be good! *sobs*
LOVED this chapter. The dreams were awesome... so well written! and the scenes with dick and logan=love. *hint more dick!* and... corny! haha! yes!
^.^ great chapter!

kallie_kat September 17 2006, 04:39:59 UTC

Hah! Your Dick is right on the money. And that sounds really bad, doesn't it? But he's just perfect, and I love the way he rationalized thinking about Bettina.

shinysylver September 17 2006, 05:18:40 UTC

I am totally psyched for a drunk Dick and Logan to come save the day. I'm glad to see you all using Dick. I'm also glad that even drunk Logan could read Veronica's voice so well. Let's just hope that she opens up to him for a change.

rindee September 17 2006, 07:22:37 UTC

Oh, yeah! Great chapter. I know it's wrong, but I just love the VMVO thoughts. This one is so sarcastic it's priceless: “Super,” Veronica managed, as she dug in her bag for her wallet.

“So how are we doing?”

Oooh goody. Now we’re chatting.

“Well, we can’t really complain.”

Unless we were being honest, of course. But really, who would ever do that?

I loved the telephone call at the end, especially how Logan knew there was something wrong and had to get back to Neptune. I loved both of the dream sequences, but especially the beginning one that started as a fantasy and morphed into a horror film. The MOTW was great - and Corny? Too funny. Wonderful job.

Yeay! oliviamars September 17 2006, 08:06:04 UTC

Ui, chapter 13! Either you posted the chapter one minute ago or I am too dumb to notice that it was there all the time. Whatever. I'm happy I can read it now!