Comments | vm_summer: Chapter 13: Cho-sen Pizza

ladydisdain225 in vm_summer

Chapter 13: Cho-sen Pizza

Sep 16, 2006 21:43

Title: All Fall Down
Pairing / Character: Veronica/Logan, Keith
Rating: PG-13 to R
Words: 96,545
Summary: In Neptune, the brighter the summer sun, the deeper the shadows.
Spoilers / Warnings: Seasons 1 and 2 / Language and adult situations
Chapter 13: Cho-sen Pizza
Authors: ladyanne04 and ladydisdain225
Additional Characters: Mr. Cho, Corny, Dick
Rating: PG
Words: 6600
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keith, mr. cho, back-up, dick, corny, veronica, all fall down, ladyanne04, logan, ladydisdain225

Comments 22

afrocurl September 17 2006, 15:11:13 UTC

And the plot thickens.

Those dream sequences were really vivid, and ultimately painful to read, but I think they were totally necessary.

Veronica does need to come clean about what she knows to both Logan and Keith, before things get so much worse.

The mystery of the week seemed a bit too easy compared to all of the complications of the other cases, but that's just a personal issue.

I appreciate Dick's attempts to get Veronica out of Logan's mind, and I love the way you had Dick play off of those blondes. At least Logan realized he needed to get back to Neptune.

Great job ladies!

perfect__weapon September 17 2006, 19:41:08 UTC

The dream sequence killed me. I had to know it was too good to be true minus the whole Campbell thing. This was such a great chapter and I just can't wait for more. But Logan is going back to Neptune cause he's worried about Veronica! Brillant.

berry_hearts September 17 2006, 20:13:07 UTC

OOH. nice chapter. i liked it. Drunk!Logan is somewhat loveable, minus the slurring. And Veronica having nightmares is great. Reminds me of I am God, etc.

noneinnyet September 17 2006, 20:14:02 UTC

[i]“Dude, I never thought of that. Kinky.” Dick grinned.[/i]

Hee, this line is so wrong yet so classic Dick. I'm amazed with every chapter of this.

swaywithme17 September 17 2006, 20:34:33 UTC

Ok see I feel like an idiot, I totally believed that first dream sequence. Good Grief. Why would ya do that to me! The guys shows up with the gun and Logan was missing and I was all WTF! 8?0 It twas depressing! I should've known that it was to soon but can you blame me. I just needed to feel the LoVe ( ... )