Meeting In The Greenhouse

[vegablack62]

Ginny walked through a curtain of vines into a small hidden section of Greenhouse six, looking for Neville.  Glowing wand-written words hung in the air in front of the door --  be careful what you touch -- followed by a second message -- watch where you put your fingers!!

“Well I can’t say I wasn’t warned,” she said under her breathe.

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[vegablack62]

I'm glad this ficlet worked for you. Someday I might write a full on fic about Neville's and Luna's sixth year. This would sort of be a part of it.

There is a little bit of Neville/Ginny there. He has feelings for her, but he doesn't act upon them, largely because he doesn't think she's interested in him, and she has a lot of other suitors who he thinks would be more welcome. She knows he's interested, but chooses to ignore it to preserve their friendship. They both prefer to pretend it isn't there.

[clionona]

The picture you painted of the greenhouse was so perfect! I could see every detail, you know? It was like I was there.

And Neville's ideas make such perfect sense. I mean, everything he said was based in truth and sound thinking. I loved that he's keeping a clear head just when things are about to get really bad... Gives me a kind of hope.

Great work, as always!!! Thank you so much for sharing!

♥

[vegablack62]

Thanks! I was worried that I spent too much time on the descriptions. I'm glad they came off well. (I have a hard time with description. I thought like Neville I should practice with something I know well.)

I think Neville spent a lot of sixth year thinking through everything, getting ready.

[sea_thoughts]

Hi!

First of all, I must agree with the others, I love your description of Greenhouse 6, how it's so full of vegetation that you can't actually see the outside world. You really put a lot of care and detail into the various flowers and especially the Hydra plant.

I also love the conversation between Ginny and Neville. You provide a good canon reason for Neville almost disappearing in the sixth year, it would make sense that he's absorbed with his Herbology NEWT projects (no more Potions to worry him sick!), but being Neville, he's still very aware of the need to be on guard and to keep up with what's happening in the war. I like the idea of him doing non-verbal spells in the greenhouse without even thinking about it but finding it hard otherwise, shows how much he's in his element.

He felt stupid telling Ginny this. She was close to Harry. He was probably telling her far more about what needed to be done.*snort* Neville, how long have you been sleeping in the same dorm room as Harry? When does Harry ever tell anyone ANYTHING

[vegablack62]

Thanks for your criticism of how I introduce Neville. I struggled with that. When I first wrote this there wasn't a mention of him at all until he just appeared out of the greenery. I guess I wanted to give the reader a sense of exploring the place and Neville being a part of it and something of a surprise

[sea_thoughts]

I guess I wanted to give the reader a sense of exploring the place and Neville being a part of it and something of a surprise.

He's definitely a surprise, you can still have him saying something, just put a sentence about him "emerging from the leaves" or something similar afterwards.

I thought of the Slugclub as another thing to take up Ginny's time, even if it was just attendance at Slughorn's dinners. I'll have to see how I pace the sentence. I really just wanted to list three activities for her give as reasons that she didn't have time for outside study.

I understand that's what you were trying to do, but including the Slug Club with Quidditch and OWLs makes it seem as if it's important to Ginny, which I don't think it is. :)

Perhaps I should have her make a face when she mentions it and have Neville make a face back, since he didn't like it either.

Yeah, I like that idea. Shows that neither of them are particularly into the idea of being "collected".

[vegablack62]

Thanks for the advice I'm making some of the changes that we've talked about.

[merlins_babe]

Lovely. I love how you wrote Neville and his frustration.

[vegablack62]

Thank you! I felt for Neville here, wanting to be ready and no one telling him what was needed.

[mollywheezy]

I thought you did a good job with the narration--especially the description of the greenhouse. I felt like I was seeing it through Ginny's eyes and could perfectly imagine it.

I love that Neville can do nonverbal spells all the time in the greenhouse where he's comfortable. That's completely believable.

I want more of this story! When it ended, I thought, "That's it? :("

Great job! :)

[vegablack62]

Thank you for your review. Your comments were really appreciated. Sorry that this was so short. This was originally written for a fest that required your work be less than 1,000 words. I may make this part of a longer fic about Neville's sixth year someday.