A hidden femme's secret - Part Three Point Five

[usagi_atemu_tom]

Title: A hidden femme's secret
Subtitle: Daring Rescue
Part: 3.5/3
Author: Usagi-Atemu-Tom
Verse: TF-Bayverse
Anniversary Challenges: Week four prompt - # Dark of the night
Rating: NC 17
Genre: romance, drama
Warnings: slash, death (no main character), mentions of abuse and talk about rape, description of interfacing (non-sticky)
Pairings: Jazz/Prowl

Comments

[fianna9]

I love it! Especially the end bet between Megatron and Optimus. Getting Ironhide and the twins that close to the Breeders was definitely payback time. Wonderful job.

[usagi_atemu_tom]

*snickers* Ah yes, Optimus and Megatron... and you readers can even guess what Megatron bet with Optimus about. After all, there were a lot of things coming to light. Though it must have been something Optimus had not known of before or he would not have lost. XD
Yes, Hide and the twins were the perfect candidates to show up right in front to kick Breeders afts. They are not special ops, but for once putting then kind of undercover worked this time. Though Sides nearly blew the cover a bit too early, as you might have noticed. ^^

Thank you very much for the kind feedback. I appreciate it very much. ^^

[usagi_atemu_tom]

Thanks for your comment and for approving of the happy ending. I feared for a moment that the light ending might have been a bit too much of a contrast between the main part of the story, which was dark, and the end. But sice I received positive feedback, I am taking it was all right.

About your question with the other story. Oh, I know that one but you are asking the wrong person. I am just one of the many readers who enjoyed reading that story, not writing it. XD I also can't remember right now, who wrote it, but you could just search through the challenge entries. Should not be too hard to find. ^^

[usagi_atemu_tom]

If it makes you feel better, you are not the only one sleep deprived. To finish this story in time for the challenge, I wrote through the whole night, even though I had to work today at 8 AM. So I only got two hours sleep, but at least I had the whole thing done in time. XD My poor betareader who was nice enough to go throug all the stress as well. I am thinking of something big for her to make it up again. *sighs*

But don't worry about your stunt. It made me grin in amusement, but I did not think bad of you at all. Something like that happens to me all the time since I am bad at remembering, things, persons or events in general, therefore I might even be worse in confusing something for something else. ^^;

[renegadewriter8]

*squee* the ending was perfect and completely awesome! Loved this so much!! Hahaha I cracked up at Megs line! Really well written!

[usagi_atemu_tom]

Thank you so much. I am glad the ending went over so well with you. And somehow I could not resist bringing up Megatron of all bots betting over Jazz and Prowl. Though I decided to let the reader imagine what exactly the Con bet about with Prime.
And thank you again for all the feedback you wrote. It is very much appreciated and loved.

[zea_taylor]

Great ending to a great story. I really enjoyed the post-war world you built here. It was fascinating to see how the characters' roles had evolved and how their pasts were still affecting. You made femme!Jazz convincing, and the reactions of the others were spot on. I particularly liked the Prowl and Jazz intereactions in this last chapter (3.0/3.5). It was wonderful to see them showing such skill and courage as undercover mechs, while also seeing the strength of the relationship between them and the mutual comfort they offered

[usagi_atemu_tom]

Wow, thank you for such a detailed review. I am very happy to read that you approved of the ending, finding it fitting. I have to say I was at least mostly confident I did a good job in portaying Jazz especially, but when I wrote the ending, which in all honesty was a point where Jazz decided to take over, the ending was written by itself, and I was unsure if it fit with the fanfic itself being mostly dark. But I am one of those who believe in good endings. And I put some time between the main events of the story and the final ending, because even though I am of the opinion Jazz already healed a great deal during the war by simply witnessing a lot of horrible things, she still had her demons hidden deep inside her processor and she needed some more time to really fight them off once and for all

Create a tale based on this

[kbomb234]

I am in LURVE with this beautiful story. I've always thought Jazz was a femme..... Anyways, I want to make a sequel with this tale. I only hope that I can do full justice to this. Please send me a message back. kbomb234 out!

Re: Create a tale based on this

[usagi_atemu_tom]

Wow, I am honored. *is currently speechless*
I am wondering, without spoiling me too much, what did you have in mind for the sequel?

Re: Create a tale based on this

[kbomb909]

Hey, it's kbomb234, other account wasn't working..... Well, Jazz just got sparked, so I want to go over the whole carrying state mayhem and dealing the firstborn sparkling(s (^_-)) on Tron City. This will be really lighthearted and funny. I also want to have a background tale with Softglow and another femme (one of the newly freed femmes) and two of our favorite mechs (either TC, Sideswipe, or possibly Megatron (will elaborate)). (I like using parenthesises don't I? (^_^)) So, how do you like the general plot? (Will be on fanfiction.net & I allow anonymous reviews if you don't have a ffn account)

Re: Create a tale based on this

[usagi_atemu_tom]

*sighs* Sorry I am this late with replying, but the last weeks have been very hectic. Anway, about your question and all. Well I don't see any problems why you should not post the story. I like it. Just... will Jazz be acting... female here or the whole carrying be described a lot like a human pregnancy? Because I have to admit that rather like Jazz to be Jazz mostly the mech-manly and all and personally I am a big fan of carrying being described as something not so much like human pregancy