A hidden femme's secret - Part Three Point Five

[usagi_atemu_tom]

Title: A hidden femme's secret
Subtitle: Daring Rescue
Part: 3.5/3
Author: Usagi-Atemu-Tom
Verse: TF-Bayverse
Anniversary Challenges: Week four prompt - # Dark of the night
Rating: NC 17
Genre: romance, drama
Warnings: slash, death (no main character), mentions of abuse and talk about rape, description of interfacing (non-sticky)
Pairings: Jazz/Prowl

Comments

[zea_taylor]

Great ending to a great story. I really enjoyed the post-war world you built here. It was fascinating to see how the characters' roles had evolved and how their pasts were still affecting. You made femme!Jazz convincing, and the reactions of the others were spot on. I particularly liked the Prowl and Jazz intereactions in this last chapter (3.0/3.5). It was wonderful to see them showing such skill and courage as undercover mechs, while also seeing the strength of the relationship between them and the mutual comfort they offered.

The idea of the Breeders was a creepily possible one, and you managed to introduce a lot of OCs without them being intrusive or annoying, but just as a natural part of the plot. You kept me interested and reading and wanting to know what happened next, and the finale with Ironhide and the twins was very well described. As you said, the Breeders never had a chance against battle-hardened mechs. And then Jazz dropping the bombshell - you ended this serious story with a laugh and a broad smile that's still on my face! Thanks for sharing.

[usagi_atemu_tom]

Wow, thank you for such a detailed review. I am very happy to read that you approved of the ending, finding it fitting. I have to say I was at least mostly confident I did a good job in portaying Jazz especially, but when I wrote the ending, which in all honesty was a point where Jazz decided to take over, the ending was written by itself, and I was unsure if it fit with the fanfic itself being mostly dark. But I am one of those who believe in good endings. And I put some time between the main events of the story and the final ending, because even though I am of the opinion Jazz already healed a great deal during the war by simply witnessing a lot of horrible things, she still had her demons hidden deep inside her processor and she needed some more time to really fight them off once and for all.
Anyway, that about my reasonings I kept telling myself.

Your comment about my OCs. Here I am also glad to hear that you think that way. I am usually not a fan of OCs myself, at least not those that tend to grow into a rule of a Mary Sue or such. However in this case my OCs were supposed to fill the space that needed to be filled and play their roles without stealing Jazz and Prowl their show.
And yes, the Breeders certainly never had a chance. I would say that as criminals, who operated in secret nearly all the time, using lies as their weapon instead of pain and murder, they are not up to mecha who had thought a good deal of their existance in a real war.

Again, I am glad you liked my bombshell. Jazz demanded of that one, or she would have pouted in the corner of my room for the rest of the weekend.
It was my pleasure to share. Thank you for writing such a detailed review, I love receiving those because they help clearing up my insecurities when people point out what they liked. Always helps a lot with future stories as well when I know what kind of scenarious are go and which are no goes. ^^