Original: Men in Tights Rewrite (Slash)

[time_warper]

A while back someone wrote a review of this story saying that it was a good idea, but poorly executed. I was miffed at first, but when I reread it I realized they were right. This being the case, I decided to rewrite it. It is now twice as long. I wonder at what point things are considered short stories...?

Comments

[tygati]

The ending's a little rough, but overall it was fun. ^__^ I love that he decided to be a supervillian so he could ogle his crush in tights. *cackle*

And you should totally do something with Alex. Maybe Alex can help Avian create a new hero-type identity now that he's gonna be JJ's partner. ;)

[time_warper]

haha, yeah, the ending is rough. I suck at endings. Thanks for reading!
(Avian likes being a villain; he can see Steven in tights whenever he wants, rather than waiting for someone else to commit a crime.)

[tygati]

Very good point. ^__^ I wonder if he can be a sort of sneaky anti-hero sort, doing villain-y things from the shadows that sekkritly help out JJ while still maintaining his Evil Image.

... now I kinda want to dabble in superheroes. >.>;;

[time_warper]

o.0 Do it! I <3 your stories, so you + superheros = awesome.
(my fav. characters are the red dragon and his treasure <3)

[marasmine]

Followed Tygati's link to get here. Great story. It is a wonderful plot line and characters and I'd like to see more of it, too.

[rustaam]

I have to say I'm a sucker for superheros. It's my new obsession. Now I'm going to check out your other writings. I'm curious about Avian's brother though.

[animeartistjo]

*claps wildly*

I particularly like how alliterate and silly the names are, just like the comic book characters often are! <3

[time_warper]

Thanks! That was what I was aiming for. Although, I actually knew a guy once named Steven Stephenson...

[rustaam]

I reread this because superhero stories are like my crack now. I have something to point out that bothers me though, when Avian's nose is bleeding and then he's thrown on the bed and kissed I keep thinking that they're getting blood everywhere.

[time_warper]

o.0 You are so totally right. Ew. Gross mental image...Imma gonna change that...