Achilles' Heel

[neshel]

Title: Achilles' Heel - Part 1 of the Weakness trilogy
Characters/Paring: Bennet, Sylar, Mohinder - vague/implied Mohinder/Sylar
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: Up to 3.03 "One of Us, One of Them"
Warnings: Nothing worse than what's on the show.
Word Count: 858
Summary: Bennet observes an interesting meeting.

Notes: This idea deserves further expansion

Comments

[neshel]

Oh! Thank you! I don't mind having these things pointed out to me at all. ^_~

[neshel]

I prefer they be pointed out so that future readers don't have to stumble upon my mistakes. =) I'm a bit of a perfectionist though, so smoothing out the flaws makes me happy.

[bonniesrg]

Momo is obviously a big weakness for Sylar, he's got away with attacking Sylar like no one else could. What did Sylar hear outside?

[neshel]

Probably somebody moving around nearby. =)

[aurilly]

This was great. I'd love if you continued this. I love how you keep the ambiguity of their relatonship open. Sylar could be thinking any of many things. And it's so ambiguous what he's doing. Is he just inspecting? Is he fixing something? The dialogue Sylar has to the sleeping Mohinder is perfect.

Really, I wish this would happen! I doubt it will, just because it's a little too slashy for Mohinder to actually be the weakness, but a girl can dream.

And also, someone spying on Mylar is always great. :-)

Love!

[neshel]

I wanted to keep things ambiguous for a lot of reasons, so I'm glad it worked. I was initially worried that it just made it confusing/boring, but part of the fun of being from Bennet's point of view is the missing bits of information.

I'm especially glad you liked the dialog. The last lines especially had me kinda worried.

I doubt it will, just because it's a little too slashy for Mohinder to actually be the weakness, but a girl can dream.
It depends how you look at it, I suppose. I look at most of this, at the beginning of a fic, as them having a friendship connection that always had the potential for more but never went there. That way it's cannon, but filled with potential. I think Mohinder could definitely be a crack in Sylar's armor for these same non-slashy reasons, though I doubt Bennet would ever find a useful way to exploit it. Without extensive development, Sylar's too selfish a being.

Oh, look at me ramble! XD

[brandinsbabe]

oh snap! that was so totally awesome! (sorry for the lame feedback, im so tired lol)

i love that you used Noah's point of view. i wish it would go down something like this!

[neshel]

I wouldn't call it lame feedback. =) Besides, all feedback is good feedback!

Thnak you!

[original_tinks]

Dude!!!!! When Bennet said that I so thought MOHINDER! Lol!

[neshel]

=) Thanks for reading!