Aaaaaah. This breaks my heart more than it should you know TT
But I loved it, really ! I'll be back with a longer comment because there's a lot of precious things in this and I have to go now...
But just two things :
>>""We're TORN, but we'll never be apart." : THE BEAUTY of that line. Somehow, I knew it could be done but never dared doing it (context, story and so on...) but you did it wonderfully, I think <3
- I seriously hope it will end well for them TT My babies TT
First of all, thanks for reading. A lot. I know this story is painful, so I still have the terrible fear that it might not be easy nor interesting enough to read. But I needed to write this story, somehow, despite being honestly very painful for me to write. As I said, tons of "sort of prompts" had to be thrown away before I could actually come up with this story, and I have the feeling that this is messed up as well XD But... well, TORN as a pairing does also imply that there might be moments when they're not so close. They drift away then come back way too close to each other and so on, like a rollercoaster. I wanted to write and maybe "explain" why this happens (ahaahah I'm speaking too boldly actually XD)... and this is painful BUT they are one. Always. So please, have faith in them. I do, A LOT. It breaks my heart also, but if I wrote this, is because I NEED a positive development XD If there wasn't any, I wouldn't have the courage to write it, I swear. So please, stay tuned, and thanks a lot again <3
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SO. I must say... I really want to know how they're going to overcome this !!! (If they do, please tell me they do TT ). I'm hooked !
I really like how you write their interactions here and the (apparent) simplicity of their relationship. Ohkura seems to be honest but still... The non-exclusivity of this relationship , never fully worded, the "relapse" at the hotel and the way it seemed so obviously the right thing to do at that moment.... All of this is beautifully written. I want more XD
>>Because Ohkura had never missed to catch his gaze whenever he looked up from his drums on the stage and Ryo turned to give his back to their audience, just for him. THIS SO MUCH. It's like their gazes are magnetized and every time Ryo turns, Ohkura is there to smile. Aw <3
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Tatsu ignoring Ryo-chan? You should write a warning like, "This is also ANGST" This is worst than an angst, actually ;; But I'm kind a DoM, so, I like it xD
Yeah I know, that is super angsty, right :( ? But I really felt the need to write this story, because the struggle is heavy, but to me TORN are THE couple and there's no way they aren't, so I try to write about how they can overcome their problems. I might be a kind of a DoM too, now that I think about it ahahahahaah XD Thanks for appreciating it, I do really appreciate the effort, REALLY. Thanks a lot <3 And stay tuned, things in this story are hard but not impossible to overcome ;)
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But I loved it, really ! I'll be back with a longer comment because there's a lot of precious things in this and I have to go now...
But just two things :
>>""We're TORN, but we'll never be apart." : THE BEAUTY of that line. Somehow, I knew it could be done but never dared doing it (context, story and so on...) but you did it wonderfully, I think <3
- I seriously hope it will end well for them TT My babies TT
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I know this story is painful, so I still have the terrible fear that it might not be easy nor interesting enough to read. But I needed to write this story, somehow, despite being honestly very painful for me to write.
As I said, tons of "sort of prompts" had to be thrown away before I could actually come up with this story, and I have the feeling that this is messed up as well XD
But... well, TORN as a pairing does also imply that there might be moments when they're not so close. They drift away then come back way too close to each other and so on, like a rollercoaster. I wanted to write and maybe "explain" why this happens (ahaahah I'm speaking too boldly actually XD)... and this is painful BUT they are one. Always. So please, have faith in them. I do, A LOT.
It breaks my heart also, but if I wrote this, is because I NEED a positive development XD
If there wasn't any, I wouldn't have the courage to write it, I swear.
So please, stay tuned, and thanks a lot again <3 ( ... )
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SO. I must say... I really want to know how they're going to overcome this !!! (If they do, please tell me they do TT ). I'm hooked !
I really like how you write their interactions here and the (apparent) simplicity of their relationship. Ohkura seems to be honest but still... The non-exclusivity of this relationship , never fully worded, the "relapse" at the hotel and the way it seemed so obviously the right thing to do at that moment.... All of this is beautifully written. I want more XD
>>Because Ohkura had never missed to catch his gaze whenever he looked up from his drums on the stage and Ryo turned to give his back to their audience, just for him.
THIS SO MUCH. It's like their gazes are magnetized and every time Ryo turns, Ohkura is there to smile. Aw <3 ( ... )
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This is worst than an angst, actually ;;
But I'm kind a DoM, so, I like it xD
*goes to read Grammar*
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But I really felt the need to write this story, because the struggle is heavy, but to me TORN are THE couple and there's no way they aren't, so I try to write about how they can overcome their problems.
I might be a kind of a DoM too, now that I think about it ahahahahaah XD
Thanks for appreciating it, I do really appreciate the effort, REALLY.
Thanks a lot <3
And stay tuned, things in this story are hard but not impossible to overcome ;)
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