Aaaaaah. This breaks my heart more than it should you know TT
But I loved it, really ! I'll be back with a longer comment because there's a lot of precious things in this and I have to go now...
But just two things :
>>""We're TORN, but we'll never be apart." : THE BEAUTY of that line. Somehow, I knew it could be done but never dared doing it (context, story and so on...) but you did it wonderfully, I think <3
- I seriously hope it will end well for them TT My babies TT
First of all, thanks for reading. A lot. I know this story is painful, so I still have the terrible fear that it might not be easy nor interesting enough to read. But I needed to write this story, somehow, despite being honestly very painful for me to write. As I said, tons of "sort of prompts" had to be thrown away before I could actually come up with this story, and I have the feeling that this is messed up as well XD But... well, TORN as a pairing does also imply that there might be moments when they're not so close. They drift away then come back way too close to each other and so on, like a rollercoaster. I wanted to write and maybe "explain" why this happens (ahaahah I'm speaking too boldly actually XD)... and this is painful BUT they are one. Always. So please, have faith in them. I do, A LOT. It breaks my heart also, but if I wrote this, is because I NEED a positive development XD If there wasn't any, I wouldn't have the courage to write it, I swear. So please, stay tuned, and thanks a lot again <3
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SO. I must say... I really want to know how they're going to overcome this !!! (If they do, please tell me they do TT ). I'm hooked !
I really like how you write their interactions here and the (apparent) simplicity of their relationship. Ohkura seems to be honest but still... The non-exclusivity of this relationship , never fully worded, the "relapse" at the hotel and the way it seemed so obviously the right thing to do at that moment.... All of this is beautifully written. I want more XD
>>Because Ohkura had never missed to catch his gaze whenever he looked up from his drums on the stage and Ryo turned to give his back to their audience, just for him. THIS SO MUCH. It's like their gazes are magnetized and every time Ryo turns, Ohkura is there to smile. Aw <3
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>> Ohkura seems to be honest but still (...) the "relapse" at the hotel and the way it seemed so obviously the right thing to do at that moment Yeah. Of course the first is a fact and the second is something that, well, I can't assume it is as well. But these opposite sides of Ohkura kind of tear me apart, and that's what probably was/is the most painful thing for me to write. Like, no way he is totally not interested in Ryochan, but at the same time his mind-soul-body is so away from him lately ? Dunno. But I wanted to write about it... so hard XD
>> said no other word when Ryo had silently grabbed his hand firmly and led the two of them to his own room. ♥_♥ The images it creates in my mind Ah yes, my fav part of this chpt probably XD
But I loved it, really ! I'll be back with a longer comment because there's a lot of precious things in this and I have to go now...
But just two things :
>>""We're TORN, but we'll never be apart." : THE BEAUTY of that line. Somehow, I knew it could be done but never dared doing it (context, story and so on...) but you did it wonderfully, I think <3
- I seriously hope it will end well for them TT My babies TT
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I know this story is painful, so I still have the terrible fear that it might not be easy nor interesting enough to read. But I needed to write this story, somehow, despite being honestly very painful for me to write.
As I said, tons of "sort of prompts" had to be thrown away before I could actually come up with this story, and I have the feeling that this is messed up as well XD
But... well, TORN as a pairing does also imply that there might be moments when they're not so close. They drift away then come back way too close to each other and so on, like a rollercoaster. I wanted to write and maybe "explain" why this happens (ahaahah I'm speaking too boldly actually XD)... and this is painful BUT they are one. Always. So please, have faith in them. I do, A LOT.
It breaks my heart also, but if I wrote this, is because I NEED a positive development XD
If there wasn't any, I wouldn't have the courage to write it, I swear.
So please, stay tuned, and thanks a lot again <3 ( ... )
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SO. I must say... I really want to know how they're going to overcome this !!! (If they do, please tell me they do TT ). I'm hooked !
I really like how you write their interactions here and the (apparent) simplicity of their relationship. Ohkura seems to be honest but still... The non-exclusivity of this relationship , never fully worded, the "relapse" at the hotel and the way it seemed so obviously the right thing to do at that moment.... All of this is beautifully written. I want more XD
>>Because Ohkura had never missed to catch his gaze whenever he looked up from his drums on the stage and Ryo turned to give his back to their audience, just for him.
THIS SO MUCH. It's like their gazes are magnetized and every time Ryo turns, Ohkura is there to smile. Aw <3 ( ... )
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Yeah. Of course the first is a fact and the second is something that, well, I can't assume it is as well. But these opposite sides of Ohkura kind of tear me apart, and that's what probably was/is the most painful thing for me to write. Like, no way he is totally not interested in Ryochan, but at the same time his mind-soul-body is so away from him lately ?
Dunno. But I wanted to write about it... so hard XD
>> said no other word when Ryo had silently grabbed his hand firmly and led the two of them to his own room.
♥_♥ The images it creates in my mind
Ah yes, my fav part of this chpt probably XD
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