Comments | szaleniec1000: Hermione's Talent part 2 Chapters 13-27

szaleniec1000

Hermione's Talent part 2 Chapters 13-27

Jul 24, 2012 13:37

In which they all live happily ever after. Or shag, at any rate.

( The final chapters )

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sickbritkid2 July 24 2012, 23:04:13 UTC

"And they've got a concert in Hogsmeade coming up!"

And now, more than ever, I'm wishing that they would turn out to be Volfemort and da Death Dealers and Avada Kadavra the entire cast of this shite...

sickbritkid2 July 24 2012, 23:07:45 UTC

"WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT? I THOUGHT THAT YOU SAID YOU GUYS AGREED TO THIS BREAK, BUT YOU'RE ACTING AS IF YOU GUYS NEVER WENT ON A BREAK. I SAW THE WAY YOU WERE LOOKING AT HER WHEN SHE WAS DANCING WITH NOTT. YOU CAME WITH ME NOT THAT SLUT, SO WHY DO YOU CARE WHO OR HOW SHE WAS DANCING WITH?"

I know I've already used this joke, but it bears repeating:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7pdWAcK6Eh8

szaleniec1000 July 24 2012, 23:35:04 UTC

LOUD NOISES!

sickbritkid2 July 24 2012, 23:11:15 UTC

This description really conveys the depths of Draco's suffering. No, wait, that's mine from reading it.

*tired monotone*

I agree. This tore at my very heart. I was crying into the screen.

sickbritkid2 July 24 2012, 23:13:15 UTC

I allowed him to deepen the kiss, he moves his hands to my ass and picks me up.

Why the fuck does Hermione have a donkey in their dorm? And why was Draco moving his hands toward it in the middle of foreplay!?

szaleniec1000 July 24 2012, 23:36:35 UTC

That too. Obviously they managed to get it down from Gryffindor Tower in the end.

taekarado July 25 2012, 11:31:42 UTC

its sad when the donkey is the most IC character in the fic.

sickbritkid2 July 24 2012, 23:14:46 UTC

So she's not moaning because she's randy, she's moaning in order to make herself randy. Apparently she's forgotten that this is supposed to be a causal party.

I don't get it...

szaleniec1000 July 24 2012, 23:37:37 UTC

Well, normally that kind of moaning is caused by someone being randy, not the actual cause of the randiness. The causality is inverted, so it's not a causal party.

sickbritkid2 July 25 2012, 00:59:29 UTC

Ah, of course.

I thought you put "casual" at first...

szaleniec1000 July 25 2012, 01:06:36 UTC

I thought the author had written "casual" (as she clearly intended) the first time I read it. I don't know why, but that's a really hard typo to spot.