Hermione's Talent part 2 Chapters 13-27
In which they all live happily ever after. Or shag, at any rate.
I headed up to Professor Dumbledor if he was willing to have a little dance to lighten up everyone's spirits after what had happened these past few days and I thought we could use some fun right now in our lives.
They could call it the "w00t, Ron's dead, the Death Eaters are still at large and we should be revising for our N.E.W.T.s!" party.
I even told him that I would sing for the dance. He said that was a good idea an the dance would be held tomorrow.
Or the "everyone's up for a party on 24 hours' notice!" party.
"Attention students! Now Ms. Granger has came to me with an idea, she asked me if we could have another dance. And since the sad events that had just happened I agreed with her.
Yes, you just said. You don't have to reiterate the story when the chapters are of Hogwarts Exposed proportions, let alone when they're as insubstantial as this.
This dance will be held tomorrow after dinner it will be a causal dance
Because that one time they tried an acausal dance, it was a complete disaster and nobody knows why.
wear what you would wear on the weekends.
So, regular robes as opposed to dress robes then.
The next day I was excited I was going to show Draco that I want to be with him, that I love him.
Or you could just, you know, say something to him. We get a scene non-transition to presumably the following night:
"Hey everyone I hope you like the songs I've picked out to sing for you guys they will be all muggle songs so you probally won't know any of them.
"Especially as none of them have been released yet!"
Anyways the first song I'm going to be singing will be Who Says by Selena Gomez."
Ladies and gentlemen, the first song worth fourteen anachronism points (ANACHRONISM POINTS: 180) and I don't think it was long out when this chapter was written. Hermione's Talent part 2 was started on the 20th November 2010, finished on the 17th June 2011 and the song released (per Wikipedia) on the 14th March 2011. The song chapters this time around are even more phoned in than before, with just Hermione's brief intro, sometimes a footnote and otherwise just the song lyrics, nothing happening between lines. And no rapping Neville. :(
The first song was amazing I can't wait till the last song though it will get Draco's attention. Or at least I hope it does.
Because nothing says romantic like passive-aggressive singing.
"Okay everyone the next song I'll be singing is from a tv show called Glee, the song is called Loser Like Me.
Another March 2011 release. I wonder if the author was writing this in March 2011? I'm not in the least surprised she's a Glee fan, because I don't even watch it and I can still see its influence all over the premise of Hermione's Talent. Oh, and let's not forget:
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 194
Quite apart from the anachronism, how on Earth is anyone watching TV at Hogwarts? I missed the part where they have Sky in the dorms.
Okay everyone I hope you love this song it's one of my favorite songs that I know hope you enjoy it. The song is called Born This Way by Lady GaGa.
Ah, she's diversifying. Now we have a song from February 2011.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 208
"Hey everyone hope you love the songs I've picked out so far. I'm going to go out of my normal comfort zone and I'm going to sing one of my favorite country songs.
It might be a different genre, but if it's still one of your favourites you're hardly going out of your comfort zone.
It's called This One's For The Girl by Martina McBride enjoy.
Which was released in 2003, making it positively ancient by this author's standards, but still:
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 214
If the song chapters looked phoned in, Chapter 18 takes the biscuit, consisting as it does of a few lines of unattributed dialogue and absolutely nothing else.
"Hey Mione
STOP FUCKING SAYING "MIONE".
you're doing great up there. Draco is going to wish he never asked for that break."
"Wait what is Ginny talking about Mione? I thought you and Malfoy were doing great. Last I saw you guys you guys looked so in love what happened?"
Nobody talks about anything else in this damn fic.
"Well Harry if you must know he asked to go on a break. He thought that I needed a break to get through everything that has happened the past few days. I was going to tell him that I love him and wanted to thank him for being there for me through this whole entire thing, but he said that he thought it would be better if we go on a break so I just agreed with him."
Did he want to go on a break? I think I missed that part.
"Really wow. Well you want me to go knock some sense into him?"
"No Harry I've already got a plan that will wish he never made that idea to take a break"
"I'm going to sing at him!"
"So Ginny how have you been lately?"
"Harry just shut up and kiss me already."
The author has apparently only just remembered that Harry and Ginny are supposed to be an item.
"Ok everyone I'm back this song is called Blow by Kesha enjoy"
The title of the song describes what this fic does.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 228
I thought to myself, I can't wait till Draco see's what I'm going to be wearing for my last song. I also can't wait too see his face when he hear's and see's what I'm going to be singing and dancing to. He's going to wish he never made the choice to take a break with us, I'm going to prove him how wrong he was to make that choice.
This would be lousy foreshadowing even if there was anything between this line and the revelation.
"Hey I'll be singing about 4 or 5 more songs then we'll have to end this wonderful party. This next song I'll be singing is from one of my favorite bands. The song is called Sing by My Chemical Romance."
"And they've got a concert in Hogsmeade coming up!"
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 241
"The next song I shall be singing is call Lost In You by Three Days Grace."
You know, somebody should remind the author of the existence of decades before the '10s.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 255
I'm not snipping anything other than the song lyrics themselves, by the way. This is all the fic consists of right now.
"I'm going to slow it down a little let everyone catch their breath and rest their feet for a little bit the next song I'm going to sing is What Hurts The Most by Rascal Flatts"
I guess the '00s are a start.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 264
"Ok I'll be singing two more songs then we'll have to leave and head to bed. This song is called Pain by Three Days Grace"
Who I'm guessing the author has just discovered, considering they've had two songs in the last three chapters and none before that.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 273
"Well everyone we have one more song to sing they I expect you all to head up to your beds you still have classes tomorrow morning. Now Ms. Granger shall be singing S&M by Rihanna."
Welcome back to 2011.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 287
This is Hermione's grand finale number, by the way. LOL forever.
When the curtains opened all they saw was me facing the other way. Then the music started and a spot light hit me I turned around and saw every single guy minus Harry (well he looked more shocked) staring at me with their mouths opened.
Because all the boys at Hogwarts fancy Talent!Hermione. Just in case you forgot where I found this fic. All of the boys and none of the girls at that, so apparently nobody is gay in the Talentverse.
I searched the crowd for Draco and found him staring at me like I just walked in nude.
And now we get a Hogwarts Exposed crossover.
I saw his date giving me a dirty look. I really didn't care, I was going to show her not to mess with what's mine.
The last time someone tried to show someone not to mess with what was "theirs" in this fic, a wild Death Eater appeared.
I started moving my hips slapping the front of my hips with my hands brought them up up to my breast's.
Her breast's what? Enquiring minds want to know.
I brought one hand to my mouth and pulled the glove off with my teeth, I then waved it around above my head and threw it into the crowd. I saw every guy dive for it like mad men.
This is the first indication that she was wearing a glove, or indeed that she was wearing anything beyond whatever it is that makes everyone react as though she'd just walked on stage au naturel. I appreciate not having rambling, My Immortal-esque "I was wearing black eyeliner and black eyeshadow and black leather pants and black shoes and a black MCR shirt that was black" descriptions, but there's such a thing as too far in the other direction. Anyway, she dances with Theodore Nott and Dean Thomas (neither of whom had appeared hitherto in this fic, and neither of whom will appear again) to make Draco jealous, because the author is now scraping the bottom of the cliché barrel. Then at the end she runs off to the love shack Head Boy and Girl's private quarters, knowing that Draco will see she's gone when the lights go up and will go looking for her there. We duly shift into his POV for the start of Chapter 25, but before he gets the chance "Astroia" reveals that she's also caught the ALLCAPS bug.
The lights went out and I couldn't see anything. When they came back on I looked around for Hermione but I couldn't find her anywhere. Astroia came up to me and said "WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT? I THOUGHT THAT YOU SAID YOU GUYS AGREED TO THIS BREAK, BUT YOU'RE ACTING AS IF YOU GUYS NEVER WENT ON A BREAK. I SAW THE WAY YOU WERE LOOKING AT HER WHEN SHE WAS DANCING WITH NOTT. YOU CAME WITH ME NOT THAT SLUT, SO WHY DO YOU CARE WHO OR HOW SHE WAS DANCING WITH?"
What a charming girl. I can see what Draco saw in her, but only because she's not quite as awful as Talent!Hermione.
SHUT THE FUCK UP WOMAN!
Our hero, ladies and gentlemen!
I now realize I had made the hugiest mistake of my like by ever letting her go in the first place. I had to find her and tell her I love her and want to be with her. I knew where she was at she wouldn't go anywhere with those clothes on, and if she wasn't still in the Great hall then that means she went to our common room.
Yay convenient insight!
By the time I had got there I was out of breath. I had ran the whole way there.
You ran, or you had run.
I could barely get the password out to get into our room.
And the author never bothered to decide what the password to these non-canonical quarters even was.
When I finally did I ran up to her room and opened the door. What I saw nearly made me faint. There was Hermione laying in her bed in nothing but a towel. Her hair was still wet, and you could see drops of water still on her skin.
I could? Since when was I there? Anyway, this is where Draco, having realised how wrong he was and that he wanted Hermione back, confesses his undying love:
"You did all of this just to get back at me. You acted and dressed like a whore to what prove that I was fucking wrong! Are you stupid? I thought..."
Or else that. Of course this unleashes another torrent of ALLCAPS that rapidly becomes incoherent:
WHEN YOU SAID YOU WANTED TO GO ON A BREAK MY HEART IT BROKE, SO I JUST AGREED WITH YOUR ASS.
Did the author use a Markov chain generator to write this sentence? Because it really makes no sense. She agreed with his arse? Is she trying to say that he was talking out of it or something? Because that's a bit too oblique for the airhead that Hermione is reduced to in this fic.
I watched as Draco left the room with his head down, he shut the door, then using my wand I locked both my bedroom door and the door to my bathroom. I then jumped on my bed, buried my head in my pillow and cried. I didn't care if Draco could hear me, I hoped that he would so he knew how much pain he has caused me. This was not how I wanted this to go. I knew he would be upset, but I didn't think he would call me a whore or stupid.
Neither did I. Not because I think he's too nice to insult someone, but that he's usually a little more imaginative than that.
I walked into my room layed down on my bed, and that's when I heard the sound that broke my heart into pieces. I heard Hermione crying her eyes out, I couldn't stand listening to her cry.
This description really conveys the depths of Draco's suffering. No, wait, that's mine from reading it.
So I got up walked through the bathroom to her door, tried to open it, only to find it locked. So using my wand I unlocked it,
So much for magical locks.
I walked up to her bed, sat on the edge and put my hand on her shoulder and said
... "Ouch!" because she just hexed him.
"Hermione, I know you don't want me near you right now, but I can't stand to hear or see you cry. Knowing that I'm the one that did this to you makes it even worse. I don't know what came over me, I just said the first thing that came out of my mouth.
Yes, that's generally how speech works.
Anyway, Hermione somehow has the patience to listen to a wall of platitudinous dreck and:
"Okay Draco I'll give you another chance, but if you hurt me again I won't give you another chance after this. I'm not ready to tell you I love you, but I do want to try again. Will you stay here tonight and sleep next to me?"
It's not what you think, but only because the author is saving it for the final chapter. Yes, Hermione's Talent goes out with a bang in more ways than one.
I kissed Draco softly on the lips, he started running his tongue over my bottom lip begging gor entrance.
Fortunately (unfortunately?) the scene doesn't live up to that typo.
I allowed him to deepen the kiss, he moves his hands to my ass and picks me up. I wrap my legs around his waist, I feel his cock rubbing up against my clit making me gasp.
Generiporn: now with comma splices and tense shifts!
"I'll stop as long as you still let me make you cum. Please, I need to finish what i started somehow."
"I don't care I would end up going back to my room and finish what you started anyway's at least this way I can watch you make me cum."
"Ugh Hermione don't talk that way unless you want me to take you right now cause I might not be able to hold back if you talk that way."
"Part of me is saying screw it Draco make love to me, but I know we shouldn't. Please just make me cum so I can make you cum."
I forgot. What was their objective again?
Next thing I know we are out of the shower and on the bathroom floor. Draco starts kissing his way down my neck, when he reaches my breast one hand plays with one nipple while his mouth is sucking and flicking the other making me moan my hands go to his hair making him suck harder.
But not as much as the fic.
He then switches sides,
"I'm now a Death Eater again! Surprise!"
when I felt the cold air on my hard nipples I moan making me want him to fuck me right now.
So she's not moaning because she's randy, she's moaning in order to make herself randy. Apparently she's forgotten that this is supposed to be a causal party.
He does the same thing he did to the other nipple,
Thankfully not the same thing as Hooch did.
then he starts kissing and licking his way down my navel until he gets to my hip bones. He looks up at me and smirks, which makes me wetter. Next thing I know his lips are on my clit sucking and flicking his tongue making me scream and moan his name for more. I grab his hair to keep him where he's at. I know I'm close but he isn't ready for me to cum yet
But Preacher McGongel insisted.
so he grabs my wrists pulling my hands out of his hair, and starts to lick my slit making me squirm. He holds my hips in place then I feel his tongue enter me god did it feel amazing.
It hasn't escaped my notice that this is the most description we've had of anything in all 47 chapters of the Hermione's Talent duology. Shades of Dark Secrets?
"Draco DRACO FUCK GOD I THINK I'M GOING TO CUM!"
This is the most thinking Talent!Hermione has ever done.
I can feel him smirk against my pussy and he stick 2 fingers
... up at canon.
in my pussy
Poor Crookshanks. First he gets a bridge dropped on him, then this. What happened to his replacement, anyway?
and removes his mouth making me whimper,
Why are her reactions described entirely in terms of what noises she's making? We're supposed to be inside her head. The first-person narration makes this entirely unambiguous.
but then I feel his tongue on my clit again and he starts sucking hard
Unlike Hermione's Talent, which started sucking hard 46 chapters ago. Then he put his thingie in her you-know-what and they did it for the first time:
I didn't get to finish my sentence because Draco had shoved his dick into my pussy making me moan so loud that I was sure the whole castle had heard me.
So much for the Imperturbable Charm.
He goes faster bringing his hand between us and starts rubbing my clit making me scream his name.
"DRACOOOOOOO!"
"Oh mi fuking gud Draco!1"
"That was the best sex I have ever had. God you are amazing Hermione."
If that's the best sex ever, I'd hate to see the worst.
I headed up to Professor Dumbledor if he was willing to have a little dance to lighten up everyone's spirits after what had happened these past few days and I thought we could use some fun right now in our lives.
They could call it the "w00t, Ron's dead, the Death Eaters are still at large and we should be revising for our N.E.W.T.s!" party.
I even told him that I would sing for the dance. He said that was a good idea an the dance would be held tomorrow.
Or the "everyone's up for a party on 24 hours' notice!" party.
"Attention students! Now Ms. Granger has came to me with an idea, she asked me if we could have another dance. And since the sad events that had just happened I agreed with her.
Yes, you just said. You don't have to reiterate the story when the chapters are of Hogwarts Exposed proportions, let alone when they're as insubstantial as this.
This dance will be held tomorrow after dinner it will be a causal dance
Because that one time they tried an acausal dance, it was a complete disaster and nobody knows why.
wear what you would wear on the weekends.
So, regular robes as opposed to dress robes then.
The next day I was excited I was going to show Draco that I want to be with him, that I love him.
Or you could just, you know, say something to him. We get a scene non-transition to presumably the following night:
"Hey everyone I hope you like the songs I've picked out to sing for you guys they will be all muggle songs so you probally won't know any of them.
"Especially as none of them have been released yet!"
Anyways the first song I'm going to be singing will be Who Says by Selena Gomez."
Ladies and gentlemen, the first song worth fourteen anachronism points (ANACHRONISM POINTS: 180) and I don't think it was long out when this chapter was written. Hermione's Talent part 2 was started on the 20th November 2010, finished on the 17th June 2011 and the song released (per Wikipedia) on the 14th March 2011. The song chapters this time around are even more phoned in than before, with just Hermione's brief intro, sometimes a footnote and otherwise just the song lyrics, nothing happening between lines. And no rapping Neville. :(
The first song was amazing I can't wait till the last song though it will get Draco's attention. Or at least I hope it does.
Because nothing says romantic like passive-aggressive singing.
"Okay everyone the next song I'll be singing is from a tv show called Glee, the song is called Loser Like Me.
Another March 2011 release. I wonder if the author was writing this in March 2011? I'm not in the least surprised she's a Glee fan, because I don't even watch it and I can still see its influence all over the premise of Hermione's Talent. Oh, and let's not forget:
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 194
Quite apart from the anachronism, how on Earth is anyone watching TV at Hogwarts? I missed the part where they have Sky in the dorms.
Okay everyone I hope you love this song it's one of my favorite songs that I know hope you enjoy it. The song is called Born This Way by Lady GaGa.
Ah, she's diversifying. Now we have a song from February 2011.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 208
"Hey everyone hope you love the songs I've picked out so far. I'm going to go out of my normal comfort zone and I'm going to sing one of my favorite country songs.
It might be a different genre, but if it's still one of your favourites you're hardly going out of your comfort zone.
It's called This One's For The Girl by Martina McBride enjoy.
Which was released in 2003, making it positively ancient by this author's standards, but still:
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 214
If the song chapters looked phoned in, Chapter 18 takes the biscuit, consisting as it does of a few lines of unattributed dialogue and absolutely nothing else.
"Hey Mione
STOP FUCKING SAYING "MIONE".
you're doing great up there. Draco is going to wish he never asked for that break."
"Wait what is Ginny talking about Mione? I thought you and Malfoy were doing great. Last I saw you guys you guys looked so in love what happened?"
Nobody talks about anything else in this damn fic.
"Well Harry if you must know he asked to go on a break. He thought that I needed a break to get through everything that has happened the past few days. I was going to tell him that I love him and wanted to thank him for being there for me through this whole entire thing, but he said that he thought it would be better if we go on a break so I just agreed with him."
Did he want to go on a break? I think I missed that part.
"Really wow. Well you want me to go knock some sense into him?"
"No Harry I've already got a plan that will wish he never made that idea to take a break"
"I'm going to sing at him!"
"So Ginny how have you been lately?"
"Harry just shut up and kiss me already."
The author has apparently only just remembered that Harry and Ginny are supposed to be an item.
"Ok everyone I'm back this song is called Blow by Kesha enjoy"
The title of the song describes what this fic does.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 228
I thought to myself, I can't wait till Draco see's what I'm going to be wearing for my last song. I also can't wait too see his face when he hear's and see's what I'm going to be singing and dancing to. He's going to wish he never made the choice to take a break with us, I'm going to prove him how wrong he was to make that choice.
This would be lousy foreshadowing even if there was anything between this line and the revelation.
"Hey I'll be singing about 4 or 5 more songs then we'll have to end this wonderful party. This next song I'll be singing is from one of my favorite bands. The song is called Sing by My Chemical Romance."
"And they've got a concert in Hogsmeade coming up!"
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 241
"The next song I shall be singing is call Lost In You by Three Days Grace."
You know, somebody should remind the author of the existence of decades before the '10s.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 255
I'm not snipping anything other than the song lyrics themselves, by the way. This is all the fic consists of right now.
"I'm going to slow it down a little let everyone catch their breath and rest their feet for a little bit the next song I'm going to sing is What Hurts The Most by Rascal Flatts"
I guess the '00s are a start.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 264
"Ok I'll be singing two more songs then we'll have to leave and head to bed. This song is called Pain by Three Days Grace"
Who I'm guessing the author has just discovered, considering they've had two songs in the last three chapters and none before that.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 273
"Well everyone we have one more song to sing they I expect you all to head up to your beds you still have classes tomorrow morning. Now Ms. Granger shall be singing S&M by Rihanna."
Welcome back to 2011.
ANACHRONISM POINTS: 287
This is Hermione's grand finale number, by the way. LOL forever.
When the curtains opened all they saw was me facing the other way. Then the music started and a spot light hit me I turned around and saw every single guy minus Harry (well he looked more shocked) staring at me with their mouths opened.
Because all the boys at Hogwarts fancy Talent!Hermione. Just in case you forgot where I found this fic. All of the boys and none of the girls at that, so apparently nobody is gay in the Talentverse.
I searched the crowd for Draco and found him staring at me like I just walked in nude.
And now we get a Hogwarts Exposed crossover.
I saw his date giving me a dirty look. I really didn't care, I was going to show her not to mess with what's mine.
The last time someone tried to show someone not to mess with what was "theirs" in this fic, a wild Death Eater appeared.
I started moving my hips slapping the front of my hips with my hands brought them up up to my breast's.
Her breast's what? Enquiring minds want to know.
I brought one hand to my mouth and pulled the glove off with my teeth, I then waved it around above my head and threw it into the crowd. I saw every guy dive for it like mad men.
This is the first indication that she was wearing a glove, or indeed that she was wearing anything beyond whatever it is that makes everyone react as though she'd just walked on stage au naturel. I appreciate not having rambling, My Immortal-esque "I was wearing black eyeliner and black eyeshadow and black leather pants and black shoes and a black MCR shirt that was black" descriptions, but there's such a thing as too far in the other direction. Anyway, she dances with Theodore Nott and Dean Thomas (neither of whom had appeared hitherto in this fic, and neither of whom will appear again) to make Draco jealous, because the author is now scraping the bottom of the cliché barrel. Then at the end she runs off to the love shack Head Boy and Girl's private quarters, knowing that Draco will see she's gone when the lights go up and will go looking for her there. We duly shift into his POV for the start of Chapter 25, but before he gets the chance "Astroia" reveals that she's also caught the ALLCAPS bug.
The lights went out and I couldn't see anything. When they came back on I looked around for Hermione but I couldn't find her anywhere. Astroia came up to me and said "WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT? I THOUGHT THAT YOU SAID YOU GUYS AGREED TO THIS BREAK, BUT YOU'RE ACTING AS IF YOU GUYS NEVER WENT ON A BREAK. I SAW THE WAY YOU WERE LOOKING AT HER WHEN SHE WAS DANCING WITH NOTT. YOU CAME WITH ME NOT THAT SLUT, SO WHY DO YOU CARE WHO OR HOW SHE WAS DANCING WITH?"
What a charming girl. I can see what Draco saw in her, but only because she's not quite as awful as Talent!Hermione.
SHUT THE FUCK UP WOMAN!
Our hero, ladies and gentlemen!
I now realize I had made the hugiest mistake of my like by ever letting her go in the first place. I had to find her and tell her I love her and want to be with her. I knew where she was at she wouldn't go anywhere with those clothes on, and if she wasn't still in the Great hall then that means she went to our common room.
Yay convenient insight!
By the time I had got there I was out of breath. I had ran the whole way there.
You ran, or you had run.
I could barely get the password out to get into our room.
And the author never bothered to decide what the password to these non-canonical quarters even was.
When I finally did I ran up to her room and opened the door. What I saw nearly made me faint. There was Hermione laying in her bed in nothing but a towel. Her hair was still wet, and you could see drops of water still on her skin.
I could? Since when was I there? Anyway, this is where Draco, having realised how wrong he was and that he wanted Hermione back, confesses his undying love:
"You did all of this just to get back at me. You acted and dressed like a whore to what prove that I was fucking wrong! Are you stupid? I thought..."
Or else that. Of course this unleashes another torrent of ALLCAPS that rapidly becomes incoherent:
WHEN YOU SAID YOU WANTED TO GO ON A BREAK MY HEART IT BROKE, SO I JUST AGREED WITH YOUR ASS.
Did the author use a Markov chain generator to write this sentence? Because it really makes no sense. She agreed with his arse? Is she trying to say that he was talking out of it or something? Because that's a bit too oblique for the airhead that Hermione is reduced to in this fic.
I watched as Draco left the room with his head down, he shut the door, then using my wand I locked both my bedroom door and the door to my bathroom. I then jumped on my bed, buried my head in my pillow and cried. I didn't care if Draco could hear me, I hoped that he would so he knew how much pain he has caused me. This was not how I wanted this to go. I knew he would be upset, but I didn't think he would call me a whore or stupid.
Neither did I. Not because I think he's too nice to insult someone, but that he's usually a little more imaginative than that.
I walked into my room layed down on my bed, and that's when I heard the sound that broke my heart into pieces. I heard Hermione crying her eyes out, I couldn't stand listening to her cry.
This description really conveys the depths of Draco's suffering. No, wait, that's mine from reading it.
So I got up walked through the bathroom to her door, tried to open it, only to find it locked. So using my wand I unlocked it,
So much for magical locks.
I walked up to her bed, sat on the edge and put my hand on her shoulder and said
... "Ouch!" because she just hexed him.
"Hermione, I know you don't want me near you right now, but I can't stand to hear or see you cry. Knowing that I'm the one that did this to you makes it even worse. I don't know what came over me, I just said the first thing that came out of my mouth.
Yes, that's generally how speech works.
Anyway, Hermione somehow has the patience to listen to a wall of platitudinous dreck and:
"Okay Draco I'll give you another chance, but if you hurt me again I won't give you another chance after this. I'm not ready to tell you I love you, but I do want to try again. Will you stay here tonight and sleep next to me?"
It's not what you think, but only because the author is saving it for the final chapter. Yes, Hermione's Talent goes out with a bang in more ways than one.
I kissed Draco softly on the lips, he started running his tongue over my bottom lip begging gor entrance.
Fortunately (unfortunately?) the scene doesn't live up to that typo.
I allowed him to deepen the kiss, he moves his hands to my ass and picks me up. I wrap my legs around his waist, I feel his cock rubbing up against my clit making me gasp.
Generiporn: now with comma splices and tense shifts!
"I'll stop as long as you still let me make you cum. Please, I need to finish what i started somehow."
"I don't care I would end up going back to my room and finish what you started anyway's at least this way I can watch you make me cum."
"Ugh Hermione don't talk that way unless you want me to take you right now cause I might not be able to hold back if you talk that way."
"Part of me is saying screw it Draco make love to me, but I know we shouldn't. Please just make me cum so I can make you cum."
I forgot. What was their objective again?
Next thing I know we are out of the shower and on the bathroom floor. Draco starts kissing his way down my neck, when he reaches my breast one hand plays with one nipple while his mouth is sucking and flicking the other making me moan my hands go to his hair making him suck harder.
But not as much as the fic.
He then switches sides,
"I'm now a Death Eater again! Surprise!"
when I felt the cold air on my hard nipples I moan making me want him to fuck me right now.
So she's not moaning because she's randy, she's moaning in order to make herself randy. Apparently she's forgotten that this is supposed to be a causal party.
He does the same thing he did to the other nipple,
Thankfully not the same thing as Hooch did.
then he starts kissing and licking his way down my navel until he gets to my hip bones. He looks up at me and smirks, which makes me wetter. Next thing I know his lips are on my clit sucking and flicking his tongue making me scream and moan his name for more. I grab his hair to keep him where he's at. I know I'm close but he isn't ready for me to cum yet
But Preacher McGongel insisted.
so he grabs my wrists pulling my hands out of his hair, and starts to lick my slit making me squirm. He holds my hips in place then I feel his tongue enter me god did it feel amazing.
It hasn't escaped my notice that this is the most description we've had of anything in all 47 chapters of the Hermione's Talent duology. Shades of Dark Secrets?
"Draco DRACO FUCK GOD I THINK I'M GOING TO CUM!"
This is the most thinking Talent!Hermione has ever done.
I can feel him smirk against my pussy and he stick 2 fingers
... up at canon.
in my pussy
Poor Crookshanks. First he gets a bridge dropped on him, then this. What happened to his replacement, anyway?
and removes his mouth making me whimper,
Why are her reactions described entirely in terms of what noises she's making? We're supposed to be inside her head. The first-person narration makes this entirely unambiguous.
but then I feel his tongue on my clit again and he starts sucking hard
Unlike Hermione's Talent, which started sucking hard 46 chapters ago. Then he put his thingie in her you-know-what and they did it for the first time:
I didn't get to finish my sentence because Draco had shoved his dick into my pussy making me moan so loud that I was sure the whole castle had heard me.
So much for the Imperturbable Charm.
He goes faster bringing his hand between us and starts rubbing my clit making me scream his name.
"DRACOOOOOOO!"
"Oh mi fuking gud Draco!1"
"That was the best sex I have ever had. God you are amazing Hermione."
If that's the best sex ever, I'd hate to see the worst.