Comments | szaleniec1000: Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapters 11 (part 3) and 12

szaleniec1000

Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapters 11 (part 3) and 12

Jul 02, 2012 22:48

It can be effective to place a chapter break in the middle of the scene ("It wasn't even Voldemort.") but when you do it every time there's something going on it gets very old very fast. Now doing it for the verdict of the hearing, the culmination of a multi-chapter arc, could theoretically have worked. However, we'll soon see that not only didn't ( Read more... )

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sickbritkid2 July 4 2012, 11:29:03 UTC

She even invited her to an MCR concert.

But only if she went as B'Loody Mary for old time's sake.

sickbritkid2 July 4 2012, 13:12:22 UTC

Because seeing her give a few minutes' worth of testimony in one hearing is all Judge Ebony needs to know that this person with no training or experience would be an asset to the legal profession.

Well, to be fair, Hermione DID horribly murder Enoby's treacherous best friend and then allow Loopin to have sex with the corpse back when they were in school.

sickbritkid2 July 4 2012, 13:14:40 UTC

Upon which the Dementor exploded and sent them back in time.

I can't wait to see that POS on the sporking table...

szaleniec1000 July 4 2012, 15:04:02 UTC

You might not have to wait too long. I myself can't wait to spork it, so I'm thinking of alternating it with chapters of the rest of HTE rather than waiting until I've finished. Less chance of burning out than if I focused on HTE, I think.

sickbritkid2 July 4 2012, 13:18:41 UTC

I’m appalled that wizardkind seems hell bent on punishing two of our greatest heroes simply because they enjoy nude recreation.

I'm pretty sure it's what they do during that nude recreation that's causing the problem, you quack.

This idiot of a judge makes Ruth Bader Ginsberg look competent.

sickbritkid2 July 4 2012, 13:23:34 UTC

Well, at least your not in handcuffs

If I had my way, every single one of these characters would be in handcuffs and going on a one-way trip to Azkaban.

Their creator, meanwhile, would be on a one-way trip to either Sing-Sing or Attica.